John Doe

Rise and shine
The world outside is awaiting us two

Across leas of the sun
Just Me and you

We shall glide like water droplets
On petal hues

Then evaporate into the air
Like wet morning dew

Swaying like a summer breeze
Would gracefully do

Melting like strawberry ice cream
Under a sunlight, imbued

Like skates on smooth ice
Slithering our way through

Across the rivers of Evermore
We shall serenely canoe

Painting all mountains red
Like a dawn anew

Rise and shine,
If only you knew

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James Fraser

Date: 7/17/2011 5:21:00 AM

What the lost miss in your words Farah is so sad. It makes you think, and think as I read. Have a lovely Sunday :)

Jay Loveless

Date: 6/10/2010 10:51:00 AM

Please get as many people as possible to read Hush Missing Child <3

Jay Del Fierro

Date: 5/25/2010 12:40:00 PM

such a soft tone to this,with a touch of expectation which only one can feel and express from deep within'....the use of "mountain red",reminds me of the kundalini forces of energy,which rise-up,like the caduseus,intertwining 'till it reaches the higher-self,only to take flight on a new journey of discovery........hope all is well where you are,peace , jaybird

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/22/2010 3:20:00 AM

Together one can do so many things in life without knowing eachother..nice..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2010 10:08:00 AM

What a charming poem. Lyrical and visual. I don't know if I have seen too many of your poems before. But if this is an indication of how you generally write, I love it. andrea

David Byrne

Date: 3/7/2010 8:46:00 PM

Great visual rhythm in this!

Sami Al-Khalili

Date: 3/7/2010 11:19:00 AM

The rhythm is perfect, the ending, maybe a hint to this so called John Doe. Take care of yourself Farah, creativity within you is completely unlimited. Love, Sami.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 3/6/2010 8:10:00 AM

Lovely written poem, Farah! Keep your pen flowing and have a nice Sunday. Thank you also for your comment...Gert

Sean Kelly

Date: 3/4/2010 7:29:00 AM

Wonderful easy reading from TYOne , as ever . For the record , I dated his sister Mary Doe . They also had cousins : Reyme and Fahsow . As you guessed , all very musical ....

Robb A. Kopp

Date: 2/27/2010 8:07:00 PM

I love this rich composition... keep painting!

Sue Mason

Date: 2/27/2010 7:30:00 PM

well, dear farah I'm back to comment as I sense your desire to know many opinions for your debate class however I think the only way it will happen is through snail mail as I think the computer is to open to being blocked if you know what I mean. You've got SoupMail with my address and perhaps you would send me yours.

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 2/23/2010 10:35:00 AM

Good one!

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 2/12/2010 10:14:00 AM

Farah, the peaceful images in this poem were delightful to envision. Thank you for sharing. Smiles, Dane Ann (soup mail)

David Byrne

Date: 2/12/2010 4:37:00 AM

Pretty and descriptive.....nice light poem.

Raul Moreno

Date: 2/11/2010 12:19:00 AM

Beautiful work Farah and thanks for stopping by...Raul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/9/2010 10:36:00 AM

The romantic and passionate feel is very good then the surprise of the humor at the end adds flavor like triple flavor sherbert. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara

Brian Strand

Date: 2/7/2010 11:46:00 PM

Especially like 2nd and 7th couplet.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.re your blog Probably James has given you the best place to find info for your projects on these intractable topics

Sue Mason

Date: 2/7/2010 4:44:00 PM

Something is blocking my ability to respond to your blog, farah ... I've tried a couple of times but my opinion (LOL) was rejected and it sounds like from what came up on the screen that its coming from your world ... I've never seen that kind of message before and I didn't write it down but got it twice when I tried to write to you. Good luck with your class!! I'd try to send it through SoupMail but it was more my "opinion" than "knowledge" ... smile ...