Jinxed a Collaboration With Silent One

Draw me closer as two hearts become one.
Under sweet warmth of a new dawn's sun.
As our souls entwine there is no reason to run.
Our opalescent lives have just begun.
Burning to our core there is now fire in our eyes.
Let the cleansing rain gently fall from the skies.
Like a Phoenix we will rise in recital, sing a song I didn't want to title.
But, doubts in my mind begin to trigger, when I mention my dreams, you seem to snig*Er
Is your belief based on love being factual?
Affection you portray, is it even natural?
Inconsistency leads to so many questions, why am I treated like one of your possessions?
Secret stalking, seems one of your obsessions.
Will I ever receive any honest confessions?
Untitled our story remains, as I burn the ink, soak past pages in the sea, watching them sink.
As your control of my heart begins to shrink, finally I destroy the demons of your jinx.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023



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Date: 11/11/2023 4:01:00 PM
Brings to mind Sting’s song “I’ll Be Watching You” An excellent collaboration.
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Date: 10/16/2023 6:06:00 PM
I looked at the poem I copied and re read it and it was compleatly different. If you leave out the sentence with "But" it becomes compleatly different. I whis I could change it to what I saw. To what I thought it meant. It was the total oppisite.
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Date: 10/12/2023 3:38:00 PM
Btw Snicker is the word you need.
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Date: 10/12/2023 12:11:00 PM
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaagh!!!! I love, love, love love, love, love, love, love, This is the girl i have been stalking all these years acknowlodging that she knows And all these years I wish she had writen me this. I'll fave it and copy and frame it none the less. The Situation.
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Date: 9/23/2023 9:17:00 AM
Powerful words and emotions. Your last line sums up the journey. You are strong and radiant and deserve only the best ! Great collab with SO. Susan :)
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Date: 9/20/2023 4:48:00 PM
Facing the facts in relationships can be hard, but moving on before you are destroyed is always better than letting fear keep you in a relationship that is destructive. Great job of collaborating on this one, Aura and Silent One. Well-written poetry. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 9/18/2023 2:01:00 PM
Great Collab you two
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Date: 9/18/2023 3:45:00 AM
Oh this was our collab from a long time ago.. Forgot we did this... Some people are just not good enough for us and we have to let them go.. especially when they see us as a possession..
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Date: 9/18/2023 1:35:00 AM
Under sweet warmth of new dawn’s sky… mmm I already feel the warmth on this line .. let the cleaning rain gently fall from the sky!!! Wow!!! That imagery!!! Mmmmmmm love that!! And that ending!!!! Sooo freaking strong.. finally I destroy the demons of your jinx.. what an amazing collaboration… love this piece
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Date: 9/18/2023 1:27:00 AM
Demons of jinx! Whoa what a powerful write this is, i am absorbed in awe of the rhymes and the way this flows with so many emotions. You both write so well together. I especially love “ let the cleaning rain fall from the skies” yess let it fall, “ secret stalking seems like one of your obsessions” oooh some serious obsession and jinxed relationship youve written about! I am so happy to see you postin more and i love the way you phrase thoughts! One of my fave!
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Date: 9/18/2023 1:19:00 AM
Yes. Burn the ink... startlingly lovely. I enjoyed. God bless you, Love, Gina
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