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Jealous Sea Waves To Self

Ocean drowns its envy, in saury allure— sans fin, seize (an)other.

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Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/7/2023 1:06:00 PM

A very unique take on the mystery of the ocean, congratulations~

Di11y Da11y

Date: 12/7/2023 12:37:00 PM

I see the comment already here beats me hands down with what I was going to say... I think I'll just say I liked saying 'jealous sea' fast and then 'waves to self' slightly slower. Found doing that mesmerising - congratulations on your placement :)

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/9/2023 12:54:00 PM

I definitely used the title to try and extend the reach of those 17 syllables :D Pleased it caught your attention!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 11/29/2023 11:44:00 AM

Jamie your poem is a masterful encapsulation of the tumultuous emotions that dance within the vast expanse of the ocean, rendered with poetic brevity and evocative imagery. The subtle play on words and the nuanced exploration of envy within the ceaseless waves create a mesmerizing depth that lingers, much like the ebb and flow of the sea itself. - Blessings, Daniel

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/1/2023 3:29:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to so thoughtfully respond to my verse here. I genuinely appreciate the close reading.