Aditi Mishra Poet Rhyme

Jasmine Gloom

 A jasmine shrub, shivering on a December night in gloom
    of white petals with watery pearls, nervously awaits the bumblebee.
 'Hush' it whispers breathing till last drop, the fragrant bloom
    then leaves for the moon, the wilting shrub wonders 'why not me'...


July 27, 2020

Four Lines Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Constance La France 
~Winner: 2nd Place

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Krish Radhakrishna July 31, 2020 at 3:38 AM Congrats on your win! Beautiful as always!!

Constance La France July 29, 2020 at 5:23 PM Aditi, congratulations on your win in my 4 line contest with this wonderful write _Constance

Andrea Dietrich July 29, 2020 at 1:41 PM so beautiful, Aditi. Congrats for your win

John Watt July 29, 2020 at 9:27 AM "Why not me" tells a story in itself, but your four lines pack in so much lovely imagery and musings on nature. Love your poetry, my friend ~ John

Sigrid Ermine July 28, 2020 at 3:25 PM Lilty, lovely verse. How desperate the situation! Outside of PS, my namesake. Thanks, Aditi!

Howard Kerr July 28, 2020 at 2:15 PM A classic example of intense beauty expressed with carefully crafted, lyrical images. A monumental work. Congratulations on your success, Aditi. Howard

Gary Smith July 28, 2020 at 2:03 PM Lovely imagery Aditi, congrats. :)

Mystic Rose Rose July 28, 2020 at 12:04 PM Your four lines are exquisitely written dear poetess. They tell a story of passion and regret, well depicted. xo

Christopher Flaherty July 28, 2020 at 11:27 AM Simply wonderful Aditi flows like the wind hushing off the wings on the bumblebees back. A poetic almost Shakespearean muse. Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem praise indeed from a fantastic writer such as yourself

V. Deepa July 28, 2020 at 10:25 AM The wilting shrubs wonders "why not me"?!....~Amazing imagery Aditi mam. I don't like Jasmine but loved it in this Muse of yours.:-) Congratulations on your wonderful win. Take care.Much love:-)

Carolyn Devonshire July 28, 2020 at 8:43 AM I love the way you personify the jasmine, Adita. It would be quite remarkable to see one blooming in December. Congratulations on your win!

Caren Krutsinger July 28, 2020 at 5:02 AM Beautifully done; I cannot help but want to read the one that beat this one out. For this is beautifully done!

Jenna Logan July 28, 2020 at 4:44 AM Loved your thoughts and congrats on the honor they received.

Anne-Lise Andresen July 28, 2020 at 2:55 AM - Four beautiful lines ... congratulations on your win, Aditi :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Harry Horsman July 28, 2020 at 1:24 AM Beautiful picture of words, you take one there...

Jenish Somadas July 27, 2020 at 11:01 PM Wow.. Lovely write Aditi.. A wonderful story in 4 lines.. A Fave.. Good luck..

Curtis Johnson July 27, 2020 at 12:33 PM Hi, Aditi. I am honored by your comments-'Chicago'. I find The Jasmine Gloom rather touching. You give even more life to flowers in transition. Blessings, my friend.

Vijay Pandit July 27, 2020 at 12:13 PM I hear the voice of wilting shrub, Aditi--emotions speak in your write eloquently my friend.