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Jasmine Gloom

A jasmine shrub, shivering on a December night in gloom of white petals with watery pearls, nervously awaits the bumblebee. 'Hush' it whispers breathing till last drop, the fragrant bloom then leaves for the moon, the wilting shrub wonders 'why not me'... July 27, 2020 Four Lines Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France ~Winner: 2nd Place

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Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 7/31/2020 3:38:00 AM

Congrats on your win! Beautiful as always!!

Constance La France

Date: 7/29/2020 5:23:00 PM

Aditi, congratulations on your win in my 4 line contest with this wonderful write _Constance

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2020 1:41:00 PM

so beautiful, Aditi. Congrats for your win

John Watt

Date: 7/29/2020 9:27:00 AM

"Why not me" tells a story in itself, but your four lines pack in so much lovely imagery and musings on nature. Love your poetry, my friend ~ John

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 7/28/2020 3:25:00 PM

Lilty, lovely verse. How desperate the situation! Outside of PS, my namesake. Thanks, Aditi!

Howard Kerr

Date: 7/28/2020 2:15:00 PM

A classic example of intense beauty expressed with carefully crafted, lyrical images. A monumental work. Congratulations on your success, Aditi. Howard

Gary Smith

Date: 7/28/2020 2:03:00 PM

Lovely imagery Aditi, congrats. :)

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 7/28/2020 12:04:00 PM

Your four lines are exquisitely written dear poetess. They tell a story of passion and regret, well depicted. xo

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 7/28/2020 11:27:00 AM

Simply wonderful Aditi flows like the wind hushing off the wings on the bumblebees back. A poetic almost Shakespearean muse. Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem praise indeed from a fantastic writer such as yourself

V. Deepa

Date: 7/28/2020 10:25:00 AM

The wilting shrubs wonders "why not me"?!....~Amazing imagery Aditi mam. I don't like Jasmine but loved it in this Muse of yours.:-) Congratulations on your wonderful win. Take care.Much love:-)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/28/2020 8:43:00 AM

I love the way you personify the jasmine, Adita. It would be quite remarkable to see one blooming in December. Congratulations on your win!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/28/2020 5:02:00 AM

Beautifully done; I cannot help but want to read the one that beat this one out. For this is beautifully done!

Jenna Logan

Date: 7/28/2020 4:44:00 AM

Loved your thoughts and congrats on the honor they received.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/28/2020 2:55:00 AM

- Four beautiful lines ... congratulations on your win, Aditi :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/28/2020 1:24:00 AM

Beautiful picture of words, you take one there...

Jenish Somadas

Date: 7/27/2020 11:01:00 PM

Wow.. Lovely write Aditi.. A wonderful story in 4 lines.. A Fave.. Good luck..

Curtis Johnson

Date: 7/27/2020 12:33:00 PM

Hi, Aditi. I am honored by your comments-'Chicago'. I find The Jasmine Gloom rather touching. You give even more life to flowers in transition. Blessings, my friend.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/27/2020 12:13:00 PM

I hear the voice of wilting shrub, Aditi--emotions speak in your write eloquently my friend.