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Jagged

Written: October 19, 2023

Poem in the Fragmented Form Created by Poetess: Constance la France

The good work is done by people with jagged, broken edges because those edges cut things and leave an imprint, a design. By Harry Crews
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                        Love's blades tear within as a dull scalpel with teeth
            Leaving merely a crushed, dead chunk of flesh
It shreds, gouges, and weeps till the heart bequeaths
Offering its heart gambles will be accepted fresh,
                        Being hugged frowns as it gulps the vile reality
The dagger sinks further, piercing the frailty of sanity
A heart still bleeds while succumbing to sociality
      Pathetic, petrous parcel with pebbly peaks
            Jagged-toothed dome rising into bespeaks,
                        Each is engraved, erose, and has surface breaks.
Swallowed by a murky quagmire of an abyss beneath,
            Snapping at heels all life, laden with vessel mensch,
      Unfathomable evil clings to grief and jagged vitality
            Vow to thrive with every word your soul speaks.

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Constance La France October 27, 2023 at 7:35 AM Sotto, terrific writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, well done, Constance

Ink Empress October 24, 2023 at 1:22 PM “ A heart still bleeds while succumbing to sociality” that line stood out for me truly! What a profound and poetic write that flows with exquisite alliterations and imagery and very deeply moving lines that truly left me in awe, captivated by the depth and the wordplay! Your way with rhymes too is always so unique! And different! Not sure how i ddn see this befo! Congratulations on winning! Well deserved as always! Your work is brilliant

Silent One October 24, 2023 at 12:31 PM Love's blade tear within as dull scalpel with teeth.. heartbreaking.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Anne-Lise Andresen October 20, 2023 at 12:30 PM - Las, this leads deeply into quagmire's evil ... woow ... best wishes in the contest - hugs

Sally Eslinger October 19, 2023 at 4:01 PM OMG! Sotto! Take me to the roller coaster height of pain, threatening to leave me there, but go crashing into the mire, looking to rise…Map? Hopefully this cannot remain our world’s situation… Profound. Provocative. I see it thus, as God saved me from personal horrid heartbreaks. Or, in any case, protected my heart… Very, very moving lines!

Susan Mills October 19, 2023 at 2:44 PM This poem of yours makes me think of Paris Jackson. One of her songs has the lyrics "Our broken pieces fit so well. Thank you!

Silent One October 19, 2023 at 11:33 AM Great quote Sotto and so true... You poem is dark and deep and full of words that show angst and emotions.. There is also perspective and wisdom in your words.. You wrote this so well.

Jay Narain October 19, 2023 at 11:31 AM Nice poem. GL in contest.