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Written: October 19, 2023 Poem in the Fragmented Form Created by Poetess: Constance la France The good work is done by people with jagged, broken edges because those edges cut things and leave an imprint, a design. By Harry Crews _______________________________________ Love's blades tear within as a dull scalpel with teeth Leaving merely a crushed, dead chunk of flesh It shreds, gouges, and weeps till the heart bequeaths Offering its heart gambles will be accepted fresh, Being hugged frowns as it gulps the vile reality The dagger sinks further, piercing the frailty of sanity A heart still bleeds while succumbing to sociality Pathetic, petrous parcel with pebbly peaks Jagged-toothed dome rising into bespeaks, Each is engraved, erose, and has surface breaks. Swallowed by a murky quagmire of an abyss beneath, Snapping at heels all life, laden with vessel mensch, Unfathomable evil clings to grief and jagged vitality Vow to thrive with every word your soul speaks.

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Date: 10/27/2023 7:35:00 AM
Sotto, terrific writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, well done, Constance
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Date: 10/24/2023 1:22:00 PM
“ A heart still bleeds while succumbing to sociality” that line stood out for me truly! What a profound and poetic write that flows with exquisite alliterations and imagery and very deeply moving lines that truly left me in awe, captivated by the depth and the wordplay! Your way with rhymes too is always so unique! And different! Not sure how i ddn see this befo! Congratulations on winning! Well deserved as always! Your work is brilliant
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Date: 10/24/2023 12:31:00 PM
Love's blade tear within as dull scalpel with teeth.. heartbreaking.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 10/21/2023 1:56:00 PM
a provacative read, dear Sotto. I love how you physically structured your poem as if it was jagged...yet there's the rhyme scheme that offsets that visual. Despite the intensity of your words, the poem flows. The last two lines resonated with me, 'unfathomable evil clings...soul speaks.' We must vow to thrive despite the jagged ways of evil snapping at the heels...and I'm impressed with your use of 'vessel mensch.' Outstanding. You continue to wow me with each poem of yours I read. Sara
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Date: 10/20/2023 12:30:00 PM
- Las, this leads deeply into quagmire's evil ... woow ... best wishes in the contest - hugs
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Date: 10/19/2023 4:01:00 PM
OMG! Sotto! Take me to the roller coaster height of pain, threatening to leave me there, but go crashing into the mire, looking to rise…Map? Hopefully this cannot remain our world’s situation… Profound. Provocative. I see it thus, as God saved me from personal horrid heartbreaks. Or, in any case, protected my heart… Very, very moving lines!
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Date: 10/19/2023 2:44:00 PM
This poem of yours makes me think of Paris Jackson. One of her songs has the lyrics "Our broken pieces fit so well. Thank you!
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Date: 10/19/2023 11:33:00 AM
Great quote Sotto and so true... You poem is dark and deep and full of words that show angst and emotions.. There is also perspective and wisdom in your words.. You wrote this so well.
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Date: 10/19/2023 11:31:00 AM
Nice poem. GL in contest.
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