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When we tell our children the classic nursery rhymes, we don't often think about the rest of the story.  Sometimes my imagination fills in details on what happened later on.

Jack and Jill

Jack and Jill went up the hill
we tell our kids this story all day long
but Jill was bitter and she was savvy
and she went to her lawyer with a sad song.
The lawyer filed in the court
and Jack got the report
That Jill was after his crown.
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Bell Avatar
March 23, 2024 at 5:27 AM
Who said females were the weaker sex. Wonder if Jack was aware of Jill's ill will, and actually pushed her down the hill giving himself an alibi.
Hawley Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 1:50 PM
Great question! Thanks!
Croft Avatar
March 6, 2024 at 9:49 AM
Thanks for the example!
Hawley Avatar
March 6, 2024 at 6:25 PM
I assume this means you are entering the contest, so good luck.
Roper Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 7:37 AM
:) I got a chuckle out of this, so cute.
Hawley Avatar
March 6, 2024 at 6:25 PM
Glad you got a chuckle out of it!
Poet Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 7:14 AM
It was a pleasure to peruse your exceptional piece, Miranda. I am grateful for the enlightening example you provided, as well as for your words regarding my Limericks.
Hawley Avatar
March 6, 2024 at 6:26 PM
Happy you found this example enlightening.
Dutta Avatar
February 18, 2024 at 6:44 AM
Followed your example. Trying the contest. . Blessings
Hawley Avatar
February 18, 2024 at 7:42 AM
Best luck. I judge blind or try to so I won't know which one is yours, but glad you found my example useful.
Volumes Avatar
February 14, 2024 at 5:28 PM
That is really cute, had to smile at this.
Hawley Avatar
February 18, 2024 at 3:42 PM
Thanks, glad you liked this.
Dietrich Avatar
February 14, 2024 at 1:31 PM
Thanks for the fun example, and also for liking my "Wonderful Life poem"!
Hawley Avatar
February 18, 2024 at 3:42 PM
Thanks!
Bowring Avatar
February 14, 2024 at 4:01 AM
This is a great read Miranda with the adult version and a reminder that life is not always a fairytale! Very well written and creative. Really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Look forward to more :)
Hawley Avatar
February 18, 2024 at 3:44 PM
Adult version because if you stop to think about it, most if not all the children's stories are down right dark.
Baker Avatar
February 7, 2024 at 5:54 PM
I enjoyed your imagination, Miranda, very fun read. You are very creative indeed. Have a pleasant evening, my friend. Bill
Hawley Avatar
February 7, 2024 at 6:43 PM
I'm really glad you like what my imagination comes up with. I might do an ending on another nursery rhyme.
Poet Avatar
February 5, 2024 at 10:52 AM
Your poem explores the aftermath of the classic nursery rhyme "Jack and Jill" and re-imagines the story from a different perspective. The subject matter revolves around themes of betrayal, legal action, and the consequences of actions.
Hawley Avatar
February 5, 2024 at 11:46 AM
You understood my point exactly.
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