Ivory Flakes

Ivory flakes fall down in place
Of salted tears on somber face
Took all my love and left me ice
Wasn’t enough to make me cry

You snatched my soul years ago
With hot kisses that now are cold
Was warm with charm and I miss it
Alarms now warn you are narcissistic 

I made a mistake in trusting you
Sadly I say I believed in you
So snowman I walk away today
You are cold and I refuse to stay

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Paula Goldsmith

February 4, 2025 at 8:35 AM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed Reading your creative write again. Have a blessed day with your win as you write away..................

Karen Jones

February 4, 2025 at 9:21 AM

Thanks Paula! It was a pleasant surprise!

Ink Empress

February 4, 2025 at 7:32 AM

Dear Karen, I love the energy and emotion in this flowing with such sublime rhymes and depth! Your use of the prompt here is deep and creative, and I especially loved the lines “You snatched my soul years ago With hot kisses that now are cold Was warm with charm and I miss it Alarms now warn you are narcissistic” and the ending which shows resilience and strength! Yes! Never let a narcissist dim your light! Keep shining! Congratulations on your win! Thank you for supporting my contest. Sending you light always

Karen Jones

February 4, 2025 at 7:37 AM

Your contest always inspire Inky. I love your prompts and the beautiful imagery of them. Thank you for continuing to be a driving creative force on soup!

Paula Goldsmith

January 17, 2025 at 12:20 PM

What a creative write you have here. Love your ending. Yes, walk away from the snowman. "Good Luck" Looks like we both did this one. Have a fun day as you write away..................

Gershon Wolf

January 16, 2025 at 8:03 PM

Nicely penned, Karen. G.L. in the contest. ~ gw

Karen Jones

January 16, 2025 at 8:06 PM

Thanks Gershon!

Sotto Poet

January 16, 2025 at 5:45 PM

There are many moving metaphors in your poetry dear Karen, and it makes me sad. When people behave horribly and destroy our hearts, we always discover a lot.

Karen Jones

January 16, 2025 at 5:49 PM

Yes. We appreciate when we have a healthy relationship again more so. Thanks for reading!