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February 23, 2024
Placed 1st: It Started With a Blank Canvas; by Silent One


 

It Started With a Blank Canvas

How endearing the innocence of life was,
When blissfully it started, with a blank canvas,
Cherishing in mother’s love and warmth,
Happy as can be, cuddled in loving arms,
Flaunting vigor of adorable, zealous charm.

Life ran into hurdles as it learned to walk,
Stumbled, yet got up, after every fall,
Giggled and babbled, learning to talk;
And from gibberish, as cogent words formed,
How flawless, pure, beginning of life was!

Soon, as it donned unique shape and form,
Colors adorned fabric of once empty canvas,
In brushstrokes of inspiration and resolve,
Enlisting hope, amidst despairs of loss,
And beams of light upon tenebrous clouds.

On ambitions it thrived, braving passionately,
Yet, encountered unbearable abyss of grief
As doubt and dismay churned in defeats
And failures sprouted within complacency,
Deviating from path of purposeful deeds.

From inner peace, as wisdom vibes chimed,
Life freed from mundane, agitation of strife,
Triumphant when dreams and reality rhymed,
Questing for tranquility in eternity of time,
Retouching feats-unfinished on canvas of life.
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Williams Avatar
March 1, 2024 at 11:12 PM
First of all dear Vijay, I can see why your beautiful poem gained First place. Congratulations dear friend. I guess we are all handed a blank canvas in life, how vibrantly we paint it or how dull, is up to us. Retouching feats-unfinished on canvas of life. I really love your last line here, sums it up beautifully...Hugs
Sands Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 4:38 PM
I missed seeing this great poem of yours. Congratulations for your win. I love the last stanza. A perfect ending :)
Dietrich Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 1:04 PM
Big Congrats on your win, Vijay
Goldsmith Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:02 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a lovely write. I enjoyed reading it... Have a blessed day writing away...............
Situation Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 6:12 PM
Life in it's compleatness in the discriptive form. Poetic none the less.
One Avatar
February 26, 2024 at 12:13 PM
In its exploration of life's joys and sorrows, triumphs and tribulations, your poem offers a poignant portrayal on the human experience and the enduring resilience of the human spirit. It's a reminder of the beauty and complexity of life's journey, and the transformative power of hope, courage, and perseverance along the way... Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
Dietrich Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 5:45 PM
Very well written, Vijay. I was thinking of going with people starting out as a blank slate and then opted for a different take.
May Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 12:11 PM
A canvas that always needs retouching, Well written Vijay
Rose  Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 10:58 AM
May the finishing touches be late and be good, as you arrive in your Autumns and Winters of life, Vijay, so beautiful ! a winner set apart, in my eyes :)
Beaufort Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 4:35 AM
Vijay, I loved reading this. You have a way to take me through each phase of life. While I haven't read a lot of your poetry (yet), you seem to separate different steps of description in a masterful way. It's a pleasure to be here and read and follow along. Your poetry is packed with meaning.
Empress Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 1:13 AM
Dear vIjay! What a profound and meaningful poem this is as always you’ve nailed it and presented a poem that really would leave the readers in awe! I loved the depth of your words woven here and how youv written “ it donned unique shape and form, Colors adorned fabric of once empty canvas, In brushstrokes of inspiration and resolve, Enlisting hope, amidst despairs of loss, And beams of light upon tenebrous clouds.” soulfully resonates! And the ending too! When dreams and reality rhymes, how
Empress Avatar
February 25, 2024 at 1:14 AM
Wonderful and complete will life be? Such philosophical depth in all your well crafted lines here! “ Life ran into hurdles as it learned to walk, Stumbled, yet got up, after every fall, Giggled and babbled, learning to talk;” clever artistic diction! Your way with words and phrasing thoughts is so very impressive! Pleasure reading this! A fave this is for me
Buehler Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 5:29 PM
Vijay, yours is a tale of a colorful life, with its ups and downs, heartaches and joys. It is well portrayed, and a pleasure to read. :)
Nicole Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 2:04 PM
From ' unfinished brushstrokes, ' to a complete portrait, on the ' canvas of life. ' So true ! Your thoughts are beautiful, tender and poetic, while holding a little melancholy all at the same time. I've been scribbling a little about art, soft colors and lines that linger. It's incomplete at the moment. :) My best to you, Vijay. :) Hugs, Brandy
Rodrigues Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 11:00 AM
Your canvas begins with a mother and child! That last line is interesting!
DiMino Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 10:55 AM
"Soon, as it donned unique shape and form, Colors adorned fabric of once empty canvas, In brushstrokes of inspiration and resolve, Enlisting hope, amidst despairs of loss, And beams of light upon tenebrous clouds." Very emotive imagery. Unfortunately, trial and error seems our maturing way -- fortunately, God only records our victories, indelible in His Heaven.
Narain Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 9:36 AM
A masterpiece poem with imagery, metaphors and up and downs in real life. Loved it.
Kendrick Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 8:52 AM
The master painter shaped the design. Thanks for sharing the life of someone maybe a child or grandchild. it is interesting to watch the grow and develop. Your visit to my page lifted my spirits. Sara K
Buhagiar Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 8:23 AM
From an empty canvas to a complex of brilliant ideas, a masterful painting. Great use of imagery, metaphors and diction. Best for a win.
Poet Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 6:53 AM
A wonderful poem revolves around the journey of life, from its innocent beginning to the challenges and triumphs it encounters along the way. Your diction is thoughtful and evocative, using vivid imagery to convey the stages of life: like "blissfully," "zealous charm," "vigor," "giggled," and "babbled" to create a sense of innocence. As the poem progresses, the tone shifts to reflect challenges and mazes of life, using phrases like "encountered unbearable abyss of grief,". BOL in the contest
Cunningham Avatar
February 24, 2024 at 3:26 AM
An amazing tapestry of words Vijay, a masterpiece of a poem. Best wishes for the contest. Tom
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