Victor Buhagiar Poet Pantoum

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Irretrievable Love

"You will forget me, the love we once shared 
Has vanished in the attempt at disguise                                   
 The dreams we once knew cannot be repaired 
It's gone with the light that once lit your eyes"

Has vanished in the attempt at disguise. 
Ah cruel love, how I still yearn for thee.
It's gone with the light that once lit your eyes,
Now I feel so blind, yet I grieve to see.

Ah cruel love, how I still yearn for thee.
Wretched days are no longer worth living.
Now I feel so blind, yet I grieve to see.
Can I try for once and be forgiving?

Wretched days are no longer worth living.
The dreams we once knew cannot be repaired. 
Can I try for once and be forgiving?
You will forget me, the love we once shared. 

27 April 2021

10 syllables per line checked by HMS.com
Form Pantoum
STANZA 5

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Sara Kendrick July 20, 2022 at 11:36 AM Congrats on this winning work. Way to go. I enjoyed reading this winner. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara

Jan Allison May 18, 2021 at 2:45 PM Dropping back with many congrats on your win Victor:-) hug jan xx

Paula Goldsmith May 14, 2021 at 1:29 PM Congratulations on your win. What a story/write and picture. Love your line, "Can I try for once and be forgiving?" We all need this from time to time. Have a blessed day/weekend..................

Joseph May May 14, 2021 at 5:55 AM Very nicely rendered Victor, Congrats on your win

Juliet Ligon May 13, 2021 at 9:03 AM Great job on making the lines into something new. Powerful piece. Congratulations!

Unseeking Seeker April 29, 2021 at 6:58 AM Poignant! Piercing! Painful! Good luck for the contest, Victor

Kim Rodrigues April 28, 2021 at 6:42 PM Such a sad opening stanza...well done, sweet friend!

Alexis Y. April 28, 2021 at 10:22 AM WoW! Victor, You did a good job with the stanza you chose and composed such a sad well written write about someone losing the one that loved. Well done. Best wishes in the in the contest. Have a wonderful day- Alexis

Tania Kitchin April 28, 2021 at 4:27 AM A sad but well penned poem! hugs

Harry Horsman April 27, 2021 at 11:49 PM You complement the this form of poetry, with your sad and telling poetry Victor.

Eve Roper April 27, 2021 at 10:07 PM Fantastic Pantoum, Victor, Love the theme you chose good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve

Evelyn Judy Buehler April 27, 2021 at 10:19 AM The anguish of an irretrievably lost love is well evoked through your amazing depictions and rhyme, Victor. I can certainly see this lovely pantoum as a winner. :)

Beryl Edmonds April 27, 2021 at 7:57 AM No one forgets a love that was shared, even when the love light no longer flares. A sad but beautiful Pantoum poem you’ve penned Victor... Best wishes, Belle

Joanna Daniel April 27, 2021 at 7:38 AM You have outdone yourself in penning this sadly poignant pantoum, Victor:)

Malabika Ray Choudhury April 27, 2021 at 5:08 AM beautifully done, Victor, incorporating the quote in Pantoum form. Lost love and heartbreak are superbly described. BW ~ Mala

Vijay Pandit April 27, 2021 at 4:44 AM You gave shape and meaning to the contest quote, Victor--and now your poem evokes the pain of love that once lit her eyes. Well done, as always.

Sotto Poet April 27, 2021 at 3:18 AM Hi Victor, you penned a superb in very well written Pantoum, actually, I enjoyed the form too, Good luck in the contest, Blessings

Tom Cunningham April 27, 2021 at 2:49 AM You rose to the challenge well with this well written pantoum Victor. Good luck in the contest Tom

Anitha Jayasankar April 27, 2021 at 2:47 AM Awesome Victor... you have expressed the pain of a strained relationship in beautiful Pantoum... God bless.. ~ Ani

Jan Allison April 27, 2021 at 1:26 AM Its so difficult when a relation breaks down and is impossible to repair, you did an awesome job its a challenging form Victor, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx