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Irretrievable Love

"You will forget me, the love we once shared 
Has vanished in the attempt at disguise                                   
 The dreams we once knew cannot be repaired 
It's gone with the light that once lit your eyes"

Has vanished in the attempt at disguise. 
Ah cruel love, how I still yearn for thee.
It's gone with the light that once lit your eyes,
Now I feel so blind, yet I grieve to see.

Ah cruel love, how I still yearn for thee.
Wretched days are no longer worth living.
Now I feel so blind, yet I grieve to see.
Can I try for once and be forgiving?

Wretched days are no longer worth living.
The dreams we once knew cannot be repaired. 
Can I try for once and be forgiving?
You will forget me, the love we once shared. 

27 April 2021

10 syllables per line checked by HMS.com
Form Pantoum
STANZA 5

Placed 1

Choose Your Form Poetry Contest
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Copyright © Victor Buhagiar | Year Posted 2021

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Sara Kendrick Date: 7/20/2022 11:36:00 AM Congrats on this winning work. Way to go. I enjoyed reading this winner. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 5/18/2021 2:45:00 PM Dropping back with many congrats on your win Victor:-) hug jan xx Login to Reply

Paula Goldsmith Date: 5/14/2021 1:29:00 PM Congratulations on your win. What a story/write and picture. Love your line, "Can I try for once and be forgiving?" We all need this from time to time. Have a blessed day/weekend.................. Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 5/14/2021 5:55:00 AM Very nicely rendered Victor, Congrats on your win Login to Reply

Juliet Ligon Date: 5/13/2021 9:03:00 AM Great job on making the lines into something new. Powerful piece. Congratulations! Login to Reply

Unseeking Seeker Date: 4/29/2021 6:58:00 AM Poignant! Piercing! Painful! Good luck for the contest, Victor Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 4/28/2021 6:42:00 PM Such a sad opening stanza...well done, sweet friend! Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 4/28/2021 10:22:00 AM WoW! Victor, You did a good job with the stanza you chose and composed such a sad well written write about someone losing the one that loved. Well done. Best wishes in the in the contest. Have a wonderful day- Alexis Login to Reply

Tania Kitchin Date: 4/28/2021 4:27:00 AM A sad but well penned poem! hugs Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 4/27/2021 11:49:00 PM You complement the this form of poetry, with your sad and telling poetry Victor. Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 4/27/2021 10:07:00 PM Fantastic Pantoum, Victor, Love the theme you chose good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve Login to Reply

Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 4/27/2021 10:19:00 AM The anguish of an irretrievably lost love is well evoked through your amazing depictions and rhyme, Victor. I can certainly see this lovely pantoum as a winner. :) Login to Reply

Beryl Edmonds Date: 4/27/2021 7:57:00 AM No one forgets a love that was shared, even when the love light no longer flares. A sad but beautiful Pantoum poem you’ve penned Victor... Best wishes, Belle Login to Reply

Joanna Daniel Date: 4/27/2021 7:38:00 AM You have outdone yourself in penning this sadly poignant pantoum, Victor:) Login to Reply

Malabika Ray Choudhury Date: 4/27/2021 5:08:00 AM beautifully done, Victor, incorporating the quote in Pantoum form. Lost love and heartbreak are superbly described. BW ~ Mala Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 4/27/2021 4:44:00 AM You gave shape and meaning to the contest quote, Victor--and now your poem evokes the pain of love that once lit her eyes. Well done, as always. Login to Reply

Sotto Poet Date: 4/27/2021 3:18:00 AM Hi Victor, you penned a superb in very well written Pantoum, actually, I enjoyed the form too, Good luck in the contest, Blessings Login to Reply

Tom Cunningham Date: 4/27/2021 2:49:00 AM You rose to the challenge well with this well written pantoum Victor. Good luck in the contest Tom Login to Reply

Anitha Jayasankar Date: 4/27/2021 2:47:00 AM Awesome Victor... you have expressed the pain of a strained relationship in beautiful Pantoum... God bless.. ~ Ani Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 4/27/2021 1:26:00 AM Its so difficult when a relation breaks down and is impossible to repair, you did an awesome job its a challenging form Victor, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply