Intrusive Thoughts

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Placed First in: Pick-A-Title Vol 52 Poetry Contest Sponsored by Edward Ibeh


                                          Intrusive Thoughts

                                Lost in midst of a dense forest
                             Winding my way amidst tall trees,
                             Lonely in dark, gasping for breath,
                                  In vain seeking for a light lea
                               With thorny thickets on my way
                                I yearn for sunshine of the day.

                             The gurgling croaks of cheeky crows
                                  Invade the silence of the night
                               From their seats atop leafy boughs
                             Sending down my ribs bursts of fright
                               With doubts stifling my swollen soul
                                   And spinning my spirit with cold.

                                       Lost in a forest at late night
                            A stream of thoughts pervades my mind:
                               Am I treading the path that`s right?
                                    The essence of life can I find?
                                     Am I pursuing seemly goals?
                                 Can I scan substance of my soul? 

                          Such thoughts oft filled my dreams at night
                                At times glued my mind in daytime
                            Like mildews scourging plants with blight
                                      Still lingering until bedtime
                                   Leaving a strong vinegar smell,
                                  What It augured I could not tell.

                                 Lost in a thick forest of thoughts 
                                      Pervasive and so intrusive,
                                    In a web I felt being caught,
                                 With frontiers so much elusive
                                 Ever shifting beyond the reefs,
                                    Standing on a slippery cliff.

                             Plagued by thoughts too hard to face
                                   Erewhile intruding in my life,
                               Now with a cheer I can embrace
                               Without much ado, without strife
                              As ripened with the sands of time
                                  I value more the inner shine.

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Sotto Poet

Date: 6/15/2025 7:00:00 AM

Krish, your poem is really poignant. With your fantastic imagery and wording, you set up the stage for deep metaphors. Congratulations on your top win.

Krishnanand Guptar
Date: 6/17/2025 12:16:00 PM

Thanks a lot poet friend for your inspiring words which have made up my day. Wish you a pleasant day penning down your gems.

Karen Jones

Date: 6/15/2025 5:34:00 AM

Congratulations on your first place win dear poet!

Krishnanand Guptar
Date: 6/17/2025 12:09:00 PM

Thanks a lot friend. Cheers

Edward Ibeh

Date: 6/14/2025 4:40:00 PM

My, so many great lines in this excellent poem, especially in the 2nd stanza. Why are you so unsung? You're a poet's poet, Krishnanand. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!

Krishnanand Guptar
Date: 6/15/2025 1:53:00 AM

Thanks a lot poet friend for appreciating the above poem and for its placement in the poetry contest sponsored by you. Your words, constitute an honour for me. It seems most Soup members make comments as per names and not as per poems. So let be as it is a reflection of the world itself. .... Wish you a pleasant day.