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Placed First in:  Pick-A-Title Vol 52 Poetry Contest Sponsored by Edward Ibeh

Intrusive Thoughts Lost in midst of a dense forest Winding my way amidst tall trees, Lonely in dark, gasping for breath, In vain seeking for a light lea With thorny thickets on my way I yearn for sunshine of the day. The gurgling croaks of cheeky crows Invade the silence of the night From their seats atop leafy boughs Sending down my ribs bursts of fright With doubts stifling my swollen soul And spinning my spirit with cold. Lost in a forest at late night A stream of thoughts pervades my mind: Am I treading the path that`s right? The essence of life can I find? Am I pursuing seemly goals? Can I scan substance of my soul? Such thoughts oft filled my dreams at night At times glued my mind in daytime Like mildews scourging plants with blight Still lingering until bedtime Leaving a strong vinegar smell, What It augured I could not tell. Lost in a thick forest of thoughts Pervasive and so intrusive, In a web I felt being caught, With frontiers so much elusive Ever shifting beyond the reefs, Standing on a slippery cliff. Plagued by thoughts too hard to face Erewhile intruding in my life, Now with a cheer I can embrace Without much ado, without strife As ripened with the sands of time I value more the inner shine.

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Date: 6/15/2025 7:00:00 AM
Krish, your poem is really poignant. With your fantastic imagery and wording, you set up the stage for deep metaphors. Congratulations on your top win.
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Krishnanand Guptar
Date: 6/17/2025 12:16:00 PM
Thanks a lot poet friend for your inspiring words which have made up my day. Wish you a pleasant day penning down your gems.
Date: 6/15/2025 5:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win dear poet!
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Krishnanand Guptar
Date: 6/17/2025 12:09:00 PM
Thanks a lot friend. Cheers
Date: 6/14/2025 4:40:00 PM
My, so many great lines in this excellent poem, especially in the 2nd stanza. Why are you so unsung? You're a poet's poet, Krishnanand. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Krishnanand Guptar
Date: 6/15/2025 1:53:00 AM
Thanks a lot poet friend for appreciating the above poem and for its placement in the poetry contest sponsored by you. Your words, constitute an honour for me. It seems most Soup members make comments as per names and not as per poems. So let be as it is a reflection of the world itself. .... Wish you a pleasant day.

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