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Into The Far Distance

On a swelteringly hot afternoon; Bracing the savagery of the elements Upon sun-baked desert sand dunes A mongoose on the prowl wanders Into the far distance, forking tracks Akin to contrails in the sky; Announcing... "I was here" A blowing wind slowly erasing Traces of travel. There's no prey In sight; no oasis for miles and miles. A mongoose in the desert. Too far to travel for prey. Rattlesnakes and rodents sought... Punishing journey Let's Mix It Up Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constance La France Theme: Nature Forms: Unrhymed couplet, imagism & dodoitsu Date written: 10/20/2021

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Date: 11/4/2021 2:30:00 PM
Edward, impressive write and congratulations on your win in my Let's Mix It Up Contest ~ _Constance
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 11/5/2021 2:29:00 AM
Thank you very much for my placement and congratulations, Constance:-) Most appreciated.
Date: 11/1/2021 8:20:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this, making me vicariously experience a momentous desert encounter. God bless you.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 11/5/2021 2:28:00 AM
Thank you very much, Beata;-)
Date: 10/30/2021 11:57:00 PM
"no oasis for miles and miles" A nostalgic feeling! Beautiful writing. Congratulations!
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 10/31/2021 6:20:00 AM
Thank you very much, Christuraj;-)
Date: 10/30/2021 7:05:00 PM
Dear Edward, your awesome imagery brought me to the heart of the desert sand dunes wandering with the mongoose on the prowl. Your amazing poem is expressive and impressive. Congratulations for your excellent win in Constance’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 10/30/2021 8:17:00 PM
Thank you so much for the lovely visit, Susan;-) It's always a delight to hear your feedback!
Date: 10/30/2021 7:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 10/30/2021 1:26:00 PM
Thanks for the lovely visit and congrats, Adam:-)
Date: 10/30/2021 1:36:00 AM
Indeed, the unyielding desert takes no prisoners, congrats on your win, Edward!
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 10/30/2021 5:16:00 AM
Thank you very much, Seeker;-)
Date: 10/21/2021 5:42:00 AM
Imagery flashes by as I read your poem, Edward--the desert heat, the mongoose, and the punishing journey evoked in the third stanza. Expertly crafted details--apt for the contest.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 10/21/2021 5:37:00 PM
Thank you very much, Vijay;-)
Date: 10/20/2021 11:23:00 AM
Hello Edward, oh the desert would be a horrible place to be. I would be amazeed if some one lived after being in the desert for a few hours. Blessings ,y friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 10/22/2021 11:12:00 AM
Hello Edward, you are welcome my friend. Blessings my friend.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 10/21/2021 5:40:00 PM
Agreed, Darlene;-) Thanks for the visit!