Premiere Contest WinnerInspired by The Poetess, Miro

her eyes on the moon 
  or a twirled moustache
           upside-down questions 
     never before asked
        violins play a solo
 alongside quiet pain
    that is spoken of only 
           within poetic refrain

thought bubbles bounce
     collide with stars
a self never spoke of 
           disguised in rhyming memoirs
mazes and teeth in riddles unravelled
    as the subconscious mind 
           becomes more well-travelled

layers of thought 
     covered with layers of feeling
           all brought into the light 
 with a little free-wheeling

      though dots may join up
 there is no conclusion
     for a poetess is always 
part fantasy
        part illusion

   venn diagram discoveries 
made without knowing
       sharing of ideas 
    with the seeds they are sowing
exiting time when feeling off-kilter
    to observe all askew - 
                  a true angle tilter

 we scribble in darkness
         scribble in light
    scribble for solace
              and for our life
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Rodgers Avatar
April 2, 2026 at 11:13 AM
Dear Laurentine, a marvelous poetic journey worthy of praise and honor. Congratulations on your win! Blessings, Daniel
G  Avatar
April 2, 2026 at 1:52 PM
Thanks Daniel! I've been giving it my all on this return to soup. Thank you for your noticing on this one :)
Cornish Avatar
March 29, 2026 at 7:14 PM
Still gettin it done - better by the day!
G  Avatar
March 29, 2026 at 8:24 PM
Hey there Craig! Lovely to receive your stamp of approval :)
Kendrick Avatar
March 23, 2026 at 5:22 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Definitely a creative way to go. Sara K
G  Avatar
March 23, 2026 at 5:24 AM
Thanks Sara :) as Brian says - you gotta "stay creative!" :)
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 10:45 AM
I wonder if there is any more room in Miro’s painting for a few of the trophies won by the real poetess, I’m sure this certain one was already there just waiting to be plucked from the canvas, another impressive piece of Ekphrasis interpretation by you LG, and a well deserved top win, cheers David
G  Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 1:21 PM
Thank you David, you're very kind to me :) I'm still loving my little trophies :)
Godwin Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 10:36 AM
How wonderful, unique and special this poem is. I'm glad you got 1st place, that Brian led me to this. It is a gem of a perky delight, love it.
G  Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 12:50 PM
Thank you CayCay :) I first starting writing poetry about 3 or so years ago and it was Brian's contests that introduced me to this form - I spent several months attempting to get into the top 10 :) it was a joy to write this one, spotting the next bit of inspiration and being pleased there was plenty! Thank you for this lovely comment - I appreciate it :)
Brul Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 6:52 AM
Excellent! The last stanza is my most fave. Congratulations on your well -deserved trophy win!^___^
G  Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 6:56 AM
Thank you JCB! I do love diving into paintings and seeing what I can pull out - it can be especially interesting with abstract work :) thank you for your kind words :)
Kamoonpuri Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 4:51 AM
Awesomely rhymed fab poem tribute, very entertaining to read. Kudos! >>>>>>>>>>>>><<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<^^^^^>>> Plz also read my newest poem too
G  Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 5:15 AM
Thank you, appreciated
Cunningham Avatar
March 21, 2026 at 1:43 AM
Be it a painting or people you're able to draw inspiration from them in a unique way . Well composed LG. Tom
G  Avatar
March 21, 2026 at 10:07 AM
:) Miro definitely an acquired taste but fun to muse over :)
Cunningham Avatar
March 21, 2026 at 8:08 AM
The penny dropped, of course its a painting, just checked it out.
G  Avatar
March 21, 2026 at 1:45 AM
Thank you Tom - this one is a painting :) you can play the fun game of spotting where I've got the images from :) thanks for your comment
Banks Avatar
March 20, 2026 at 4:16 PM
This is a wonderful poem
G  Avatar
March 21, 2026 at 12:11 AM
Thank you Kissie! I felt pretty playful writing this one :)
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