Laurentine G Poet Ekphrasis

Inspired by The Lugubrious Game by Dali

from the conch 
                whispers come
   dissect
      distract

  blow upon

         scintilla branch to intrinsic thought
weighed down
    consumed

             overwrought 

         mattering - so magnified
  that I can't turn away my eyes
               reach for able hand to soothe
    what dread could deed undo, disprove 

                kisses stolen 
     by long lost words
           explored lactic fallacies 
become absurd
                  til endings are not the body expired 
       but exposure of every cell and every wire

                   cathartic grip held in awe
                       control depletes as hem and haw
        til sadly swings 
              and bridges to shame
call time
        I must 
              on the lugubrious game

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Alison A Smith September 7, 2026 at 4:06 AM A haunting, wonderfully surreal ekphrasis: the fractured spacing and cascading lineation create a disoriented visual field perfectly attuned to Dalí’s psychological dreamscape. Your language moves from conch-whispers and “scintilla branch” through bodily, electric exposure to the final shame-laden “lugubrious game,” making the poem feel both cerebral and visceral. Laurentine G September 7, 2026 at 4:09 AM Do you think so Alison?

David Kavanagh September 6, 2026 at 2:17 PM Wowza, what an explosion of the subconscious you have penned here Miss Laurentine, A cornucopia of surreal and real thoughts. think I might need to borrow that big hand to cover my own eyes 🤫never mind Dali’s, but I’ll look through my fingers and enjoy the interpretation you have provided for the reader, (exposure of every cell and every wire) sets one’s mind on fire, a Fave from me, cheers David Laurentine G September 6, 2026 at 2:39 PM 💃🏻💃🏻💃🏻💃🏻💃🏻💃🏻💃🏻💃🏻 thanks David! I'm thrilled with this fantastic comment and fave 🤩 I really loved delving into unusual word choices for this one and dancing around the imagery to create a bit of duality of meaning 😊 I quite enjoy taking on a painting that really defies being a pretty poem and seeing where it ends up 😊 thank you again 😊

Ink Empress September 6, 2026 at 12:23 PM "cathartic grip held in awe " 😱 I love that line and can be interpreted so many ways! But ofcourse your words perfectly depict the artwork! This one deserves multiple faves I will leave a triple trophy just because I know! This one deserves it 🏆 🏆 🏆 👏 Pleasure reading Sending you light always Laurentine G September 6, 2026 at 2:14 PM Aww I knew you'd like that line 🥰 haha your triple trophy predicted third place 😁 happy to share a podium 🥂 thank you so much for the fave and the supporting comments - I'm grateful 😊

Ink Empress September 6, 2026 at 12:21 PM This artpiece is an unforgettable one! Even the name! I wonder what was goin through Dalis mind, when he painted that ~ honestly genius! Hah! And must I even talk about your lines and how catchy they are? Well Just what I needed a smile! Today I feel like I am seeing kisses in the air on soup! Lol erhm I mean the line "kisses stolen by long lost words explored lactic fallacies become absurd" why do these words hit home right now? 😱 its insane! And the word fallacies! 😱