Inspired by Les Distractions de Dagobert by Leonora Carrington

  I burnt to death 
      a thousand times
  whilst I was consumed by smoke 
you took my breath
           two faces painted 
     upon your palms
               I raise my hand 
       to report this harm
so calm I sit 
amidst the flames
           analysing if I'm to blame
it takes my time 
    distracts my thoughts
                 tiny raindrops of comfort sought
      but rain brings clouds 
  shadowed days
            no exit despite a myriad of ways
I'll rest in bed
   perhaps grow roots
my carcassed lungs
      the smoke still pollutes
 
                  a single thread holds me aloft 
       no fall for me will be soft
   pillars and spikes
           of stone and smoke
    speared or just left to choke

           a thousand worlds I'll never see
   none shaped just right to inhabit me
        too much attached 
  to brain or limb
          all waters unsafe for me to swim

counsel all look separate ways
     can't consolidate who leaves or stays 
  micro exits in my head
         escape temporarily 
                   from overbearing dread
   I fear I'm too scared to exist
            that I'll swap smoke for inhaled mist
capture life and drag it in
    successful catch 
  but life doesn't begin
         all paintings have an edge 
    where it will end
          but beyond may be all pretend

or perhaps where days are painted fresh
         and I am more and never less
  and colours chosen 
                 rather than set
        and not alone
 but rather met
          and I can say which boat I'll sail
  and there is no logical way to fail
               and the sky is mine to stare right at
     and it will not fall, judge 
               or want anything back

and I'll paint freely 
      with no pencil line
  in a life 
        that is truly mine.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Cunningham Avatar
September 24, 2026 at 7:42 AM
You read works of art like a book LG, it's an amazing talent that you have. Just back from a trip to Italy, it was a full on trip still feeling wrecked. Hope you're keeping well. Tom🌹
G  Avatar
September 25, 2026 at 3:15 AM
I'll be rewarding myself every step of the way Tom 😅
Cunningham Avatar
September 24, 2026 at 10:12 AM
Have a great time, after going up the Spanish steps in the heat I rewarded myself with a cold pint of beer. Beware of pickpockets, our tour guide said they're everywhere 😱
G  Avatar
September 24, 2026 at 8:35 AM
I'm there next week Tom! Can't wait 🥰 thank you for your kind comment, it does feel a little like that 😊
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September 24, 2026 at 3:01 AM
Wow! There’s so much going on here, but the part that absolutely resonated with me, was the feeling of being trapped in a life that doesn’t quite fit, and the constant search for (micro exits) to try escape that feeling. The smoke and suffocation imagery is off the scale and truly blew me away, this particular stanza (a single thread holds me aloft no fall for me will be soft pillars and spikes of stone and smoke speared or just left to choke) reminds me of the ‘pillars of creation’ where stars are born, not all go on to reach their full potential, but that doesn’t mean they failed, which you allude to in the penultimate stanza, the only choice is to make the most of what we have, before being consumed by that all pervasive smoke once again, A powerful thought provoking Ekphrasis Laurentine, a brilliant existential read for this guy just back from holidays, and a fave on any given day of the week! Outstanding work, cheers David
G  Avatar
September 24, 2026 at 7:04 AM
I keep returning to your comment with the intention of replying and thanking you David but each time I read it I get so elated I turn into a fool who can't string a sentence together 😅 thank you! I have really missed receiving your expansive comments that open up my poetry to the stratosphere (just checked if I mean that but perhaps exosphere, no, beyond that, the known universe is more accurate!) I do enjoy my any day of the week faves, they are my favourite faves! Your insightful comment is a sight for sore eyes, a breath of fresh air and an extension to the poem itself... Gosh I should have waited a couple more hours before replying 😅
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