innocence lost, my soul paid the cost

Condemned to be my truth inside,
    to you I've given all my pride-
       when our celestial stars collide,
          I'll drain out all the tears I cried.
             For you alone have broken me,
               and threw out all my good debris.

               The depth in your imperfections-
            you destroyed all my perceptions,
          d i s c o n n e c t e d  a connection,
     never wanting your affection.
   May the shadows keep you quiet,
wishing your secrets are private.

You have stolen my innocence,
   forgetting all my relevance-
     I prayed for my deliverance,
       from you a dark bad influence.
         You damaged my mortality,
            and blocked your informality.

           I will admit I'm stronger now-
         your abuse I will not allow,
      my psyche you will never plow,
    my body clean and wonder how.
  Condemned to be my truth inside,
NO LONGER WILL I HAVE TO HIDE.
    


Author
    -luloo

October 28, 2015


Form: LaCharta Poem
Rhyme Scheme: AAAABB CCCCDD EEEEFF GGGGHH
Eight Syllables in each line
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Lamoureux Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 9:05 AM
This is so good and wow what a picture. Congrats on your win.
Godwin Avatar
September 10, 2016 at 12:18 PM
This is a GOOD poem, I am very much in like with it, I relate to the content and find the delivery impressive ... CayCay
Arnone Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 11:59 AM
Trials and tribulations often leave us with renewed strength and wisdom -- one of life's truisms.... Congrats, Laura! :-)
Johnson Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 2:30 PM
Retaking control and enhancing a better destiny, you speak to all who are stunted and enslaved. Speak on my friend. GBU!.
A   Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 10:52 AM
Congrats on your win Lady Laura. LINDA
Scars Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 11:30 AM
thank you :)-luloo
Raven Avatar
March 14, 2016 at 1:47 PM
Hi Luloo, congratulations on your placement in the contest,richly deserved, excellent write....Vlad.
A   Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 10:37 AM
Laura, Congratulations on your win. Thank you so much for supporting my contest. Stop by my blog "Names on Poetry Soup" if you like. It would be nice to hear from you and all those who I honored with a placement. XOX ~LINDA~
Scars Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 12:27 PM
Thank you very much I'm grateful you enjoyed it :)
Onclaud Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 1:35 PM
what a spell!.. congrats on your well deserved win, lou.. huggs
Cheema Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 8:48 AM
Well done Laura! Your outpour of pain is heart rending!
Kimathi Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 7:42 AM
First and foremost, I love the dancing appeal of your poem!!! Congrats Laura, for your well, deserved WIN in the contest!! ;-)
Scars Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 2:19 PM
Thank you Teddy :) *smiles* -luloo
Jameson Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 11:28 PM
Very well done, Laura. A very poetic beginning leading into a powerful finale...I like the snake format, adds nicely to the style of the work. and if the words so happen to be personal then i also commend you on putting them into creative work. congratulations on the contest :)
Scars Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 2:17 PM
Many thanks Sam, it's completely fictional. I saw a movie last year and it was so disturbing. I put myself in her shoes...Have a blessed day :) *smiles*-luloo
Haight Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 10:46 AM
Congratulations on your First Place win for this amazing poem, Laura. You expressed such sad emotions using this seemingly difficult form, which I am not familiar with, so well! Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 1:13 PM
Thank you Sandra you are always so sweet to me. I want you to know how much I always appreciate your kind feedback, you are a true sweetheart...*smiles* *hugs* -luloo
Gentry Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 8:58 AM
Congratulations on this awesome win! I'm not familiar with the form and I really like it. Will be trying it soon. I like the way you said a lot in a distinct way, could feel emotions as I read and could relate. A 7
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:51 AM
Thank you very much Susan, you are very sweet and I always appreciate you popping in and reading my poems. Have a great day :) *smiles* -luloo
Williams Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 8:06 AM
Congratulations on a well deserved win. Fantastic write.
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:50 AM
Thank you very much Scott :) *smiles* -luloo
Turner Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 7:48 AM
Congratulations on your win, Luloo. Well penned.
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:50 AM
Thank you Daniel very much, you are a sweet soul :)-luloo
Hamilton Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 7:29 AM
superlative Laura it oozes the fear and pain and I love the form congrats on 1st place hugs
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:47 AM
Thank you Shadow, I am honored for my placement, have a great day :) *thanks* -luloo
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 6:21 AM
Dropping back with my congrats LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 6:08 AM
Very nice rhyme scheming, Laura. Congratulations on another win with this one!
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:46 AM
Thank you Lin :) *smiles* -luloo
Dietrich Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 3:21 PM
a great entry you did into Rob's contest. He loves this kind of poetry, Laura! Deep and moving! Congrats on your win.
Scars Avatar
January 20, 2016 at 8:15 AM
Thank you Andrea:) *smiles*
Mcloughlin Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 2:22 PM
Such a powerful and touching write Laura, congrats on your win. From Jean
Scars Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 3:15 PM
Thank you Jean :) *smiles*
Cheema Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 1:44 PM
Laudable! Congrats on your placement, Laura!
Scars Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 3:15 PM
Thank you Balveen! *smiles*
Haight Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 8:50 PM
Laura, congratulations on your 1st Place win! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 5:48 PM
WOW WOW WOWOW LuLoo this is outstanding many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
December 18, 2015 at 12:13 PM
Thank you Jan! !Luloo*smiles*
A  Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 3:42 PM
LAURA, Congrats on your old best poem. HUGS **SKAT**
Scars Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 3:48 PM
Thank you SKAT! :)
Tor Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 2:01 PM
Heartfelt write Laura. Congratulations on your 1st place win!!!
Scars Avatar
December 17, 2015 at 3:48 PM
Thank you Michael :) -luloo
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