Independent Woman

She smiles upon coated slate.

Her skeletons become coagulated whispers
Of yesterday

Another blissful awakening
This shedding of redemptions’ sin
Under elastic dialects

Closure within ephemeral slow dances
Irregular beats of her drum

Now
Steadfast acoustic riffs
Forge constellations' new tomorrow

As she swims through cashmere laden sands
Without the need to float
On dependency’s raft

©Drake J. Eszes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Carrillo Avatar
April 23, 2014 at 2:42 PM
Hi Drake; I hope you are doing good, I'm still hanging in there. I had not been around because I was locked out Of Poetry Soup for 6 days. They just let me back in. I had to read this poem, since I have always been a very independent woman. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla
Virden Avatar
October 21, 2013 at 12:09 AM
Beautiful depiction of an independent woman...A masterpiece. Well done my friend!
Tacito Avatar
October 21, 2013 at 12:16 AM
Hey there, Sarai! You're way too kind. Thank you for that!
Gasun Avatar
October 5, 2013 at 11:54 PM
I love reading this great & very inspiring stellar poem of yours my dear friend, Drake. I love when men adore women because of their uniqueness & strength. Thanks a lot for sharing! Have a great weekend! love lots and big big hugs, Leonora
Tacito Avatar
October 6, 2013 at 7:12 AM
I think it's a necessary thing that both value each other, yes. Thank you for stopping by here, Leonora. It's good to see you here again. :)
Carroll Avatar
September 27, 2013 at 10:28 AM
Hi Drake, Some really good ink here..It was a pleasure to stop by...Thanks for your visit to my verse.. Ken
Tacito Avatar
September 27, 2013 at 10:45 AM
Many thanks, Ken! =D
Lamoureux Avatar
September 25, 2013 at 7:27 AM
Good morning Drake
Tacito Avatar
September 25, 2013 at 7:27 AM
Hola senor! =D
Deschler Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:50 PM
I can really relate to this poem. I know what it feels like to fight for independence from others and from one's self. Excellent work, Drake!...Thank you for the placement in your contest and for the nice comments. I appreciate it very much! :)
Tacito Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:58 PM
Fight for what we love, what we believe, and how we believe/love in ourselves. Wonderful. Thank you much, Kelly! And, you're quite welcome. You earned it. :)
Onclaud Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 11:25 AM
stilll a beauty, drake!.. but i guess i hafta to holler " got more" before this page melts, lol.. the old hag nags again..:) thanks for your visits; just delighted.. and oh, happy you enjoyed my piece for your recent contest...that's exactly where i am right now..:) huggs!
Tacito Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 3:13 PM
YAY! =D You're very welcome. Your poem was a delight. New poem tomorrow. ;-)
Jones Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:40 AM
Hi Drake.waking up .. catching up on your newest poems this morning..this one got me...it really is freeing when you can shed some of those redemptions sins..and get on with new tomorrows....you hit this one dead on....awesome...
Tacito Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 8:00 AM
WOO HOO! Thank you so much, Donna! =D It's great to see your thoughts on this. I had a feeling you'd appreciate this. :)
Lamoureux Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:33 AM
This almost felt like you where describing music. Mind you each woman is unique and beautiful like a song. I enjoyed your poem Drake, mind you that is not unusual. Have a great day Drake. You remind me of the Song Handy Man, all the girls are gathering around and a few of us fellows are looking for pointers.
Tacito Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:59 AM
LOL! A very, very charming comment. Interesting call out on that song...very interesting. lol I never looked at it that way. :)
Pister Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 10:41 PM
I am in Vancouver Canada My Ph No is 604 290 6575 cel or 604 530 0556 Res Vic I still can't get a message out from the REPLY link of the message inbox
Pister Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 7:46 PM
Drake I am not able to get the message out through the comments section. It keeps converting large CAPS to small caps so of course it won't go out. See last message Vic Pister
Pister Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 7:43 PM
Drake Thank you for the compliment. I don't know how interesting I would be as a guest on your show but I am willing to give it a go, I hope you're not disappointed When wrote poem I was in precisely that place I believe that there are many people, as they go through the various phases of their lives, face this same dilemmPlease let me know the next step Vic Pister
Tacito Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 8:08 PM
I'll Soupmail you and we'll talk. :)
Kithinji Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 5:30 PM
...whispers of yesterday... today.
Tacito Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 7:58 AM
Indeed, thanks Gerald.
Lu Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 3:33 PM
I felt the poem intensify and then the ending was tremendous. Speaks volumes.... Great work poet! Cindy
Tacito Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 5:27 PM
=D You're very kind, Cindy. Thank you!
Loving Iii Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 12:05 PM
Blissful closure and steadfast. I get it.
Tacito Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 2:24 PM
Awesome! Thanks, John! =D
Neels Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 11:29 AM
Its refreshing to read a man encouraging and embracing a woman's independence Drake. Absolutely love this empowering piece of yours. ;)
Tacito Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 2:24 PM
Awww! :) That was the point of this whole piece. Thank you for getting it. =D You rock, Wilma!
Thomas Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 9:02 AM
Drake your mind works like a puzzle, maze, a rubics cube LOL I like figuring out the right combination, it's a challenge & a rush to read. Really enjoyed!!!, Thanks for sharing....Cherie~<3
Thomas Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 4:54 PM
Lol, me either Drake ha ha :0)
Tacito Avatar
September 23, 2013 at 9:13 AM
Good, at least you can value & appreciate my approach to the message. I don't cater to shortcuts in my style. There are too many of those in life today anyway, causing it to spoil some folks. For me, unwrap the gift, unwrap the layers, slowly. Thank you so much for this, Cherie. FYI, I could NEVER solve a Rubiks Cube. lol
Goff Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 8:11 PM
Wow! Drake! I can hear your voice reciting this complex art! as I now know your reading style very well! Great work! jimbo
Tacito Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 8:42 PM
My man, Jimbo!!! Thank you so much. =D
Sirak Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 1:21 PM
So concise, yet with incredible power in every word. Masterfully crafted
Tacito Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 7:53 PM
Monterey, thank you so much for that. :) I think this writing was a bit necessary.
Onclaud Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 11:35 AM
oh my, powerful and tightly paced, drake... self-relaince is the most healthy way to live and is tonic for the soul...this woman is a tough nut to crack, and your lines express this so well-- raw and beautiful!..:) huggs
Tacito Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 11:57 AM
Spot on, dear Nette! =D Indeed, the woman in this piece is a toughie! Thank you so much!
Chircop Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 7:41 AM
Wow..This poem is very deep..Its like a continuation of your previous poem..The IR regular heartbeat..the whispers in yesterday..The redemption of sin...So deep these thoughts.The ephmeral dance like a short lived sand wish and then towards the end-To swim through cashmere laden sands without the need of that raft.I guess that would be an independent woman indeed....Though that raft..She might be grateful for it...Excellent dream of non independent women penned.Love the voice echoeing.
Tacito Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 8:37 AM
You're quite right, yes. Thank you so very much, Charmaine. :)
Dietrich Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 1:04 AM
love your metaphor and the part about her not having need of dependency's raft. That was cool!
Tacito Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 8:35 AM
:) Yes, that line was an important one. Thank you so much, Andrea!
Sivey Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 8:57 PM
I love the following line, "AS she swims through cashmere laden sands" That is so descriptive and perfect for the description of this woman! She is truly special, I wonder if you met her would you date her? She is quite unique and beautifully put together...it's like you pieced together an special woman, I love this poem my friend! Great Work!!
Tacito Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 8:34 AM
I definitely would date her. There are things that turn me off. One of those things is a lady who won't stand up for herself. Because, to me, that tells me that we would be able to push each other through the hard times. There would be no fear or uncertainty that "love" would become one-sided. Many thanks, Russell! I'm glad you're feeling better!
Carrillo Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 8:30 PM
Great poem Drake. I have always been very independent. Thanks for sharing and for your visit...... Lucilla
Tacito Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 8:31 AM
That is always a great thing to read. :) Keep that up! Thank you, Lucilla!
Hamilton Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 3:34 PM
stunning poem Drake a true portrayal of independency excellent pen Shadow x smile
Tacito Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 7:08 PM
Hey Shadow!!!! Many, many thanks! =D
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