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Independent Woman

She smiles upon coated slate. Her skeletons become coagulated whispers Of yesterday Another blissful awakening This shedding of redemptions’ sin Under elastic dialects Closure within ephemeral slow dances Irregular beats of her drum Now Steadfast acoustic riffs Forge constellations' new tomorrow As she swims through cashmere laden sands Without the need to float On dependency’s raft ©Drake J. Eszes

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Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 4/23/2014 2:42:00 PM

Hi Drake; I hope you are doing good, I'm still hanging in there. I had not been around because I was locked out Of Poetry Soup for 6 days. They just let me back in. I had to read this poem, since I have always been a very independent woman. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla

Sarai Virden

Date: 10/21/2013 12:09:00 AM

Beautiful depiction of an independent woman...A masterpiece. Well done my friend!

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/21/2013 12:16:00 AM

Hey there, Sarai! You're way too kind. Thank you for that!

Len Gasun

Date: 10/5/2013 11:54:00 PM

I love reading this great & very inspiring stellar poem of yours my dear friend, Drake. I love when men adore women because of their uniqueness & strength. Thanks a lot for sharing! Have a great weekend! love lots and big big hugs, Leonora

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/6/2013 7:12:00 AM

I think it's a necessary thing that both value each other, yes. Thank you for stopping by here, Leonora. It's good to see you here again. :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 9/27/2013 10:28:00 AM

Hi Drake, Some really good ink here..It was a pleasure to stop by...Thanks for your visit to my verse.. Ken

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/27/2013 10:45:00 AM

Many thanks, Ken! =D

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/25/2013 7:27:00 AM

Good morning Drake

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/25/2013 7:27:00 AM

Hola senor! =D

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/24/2013 7:50:00 PM

I can really relate to this poem. I know what it feels like to fight for independence from others and from one's self. Excellent work, Drake!...Thank you for the placement in your contest and for the nice comments. I appreciate it very much! :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/24/2013 7:58:00 PM

Fight for what we love, what we believe, and how we believe/love in ourselves. Wonderful. Thank you much, Kelly! And, you're quite welcome. You earned it. :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/24/2013 11:25:00 AM

stilll a beauty, drake!.. but i guess i hafta to holler " got more" before this page melts, lol.. the old hag nags again..:) thanks for your visits; just delighted.. and oh, happy you enjoyed my piece for your recent contest...that's exactly where i am right now..:) huggs!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/24/2013 3:13:00 PM

YAY! =D You're very welcome. Your poem was a delight. New poem tomorrow. ;-)

Donna Jones

Date: 9/24/2013 7:40:00 AM

Hi Drake.waking up .. catching up on your newest poems this morning..this one got me...it really is freeing when you can shed some of those redemptions sins..and get on with new tomorrows....you hit this one dead on....awesome...

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/24/2013 8:00:00 AM

WOO HOO! Thank you so much, Donna! =D It's great to see your thoughts on this. I had a feeling you'd appreciate this. :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/24/2013 7:33:00 AM

This almost felt like you where describing music. Mind you each woman is unique and beautiful like a song. I enjoyed your poem Drake, mind you that is not unusual. Have a great day Drake. You remind me of the Song Handy Man, all the girls are gathering around and a few of us fellows are looking for pointers.

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/24/2013 7:59:00 AM

LOL! A very, very charming comment. Interesting call out on that song...very interesting. lol I never looked at it that way. :)

Vic Pister

Date: 9/23/2013 10:41:00 PM

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Vic Pister

Date: 9/23/2013 7:46:00 PM

Drake I am not able to get the message out through the comments section. It keeps converting large CAPS to small caps so of course it won't go out. See last message Vic Pister

Vic Pister

Date: 9/23/2013 7:43:00 PM

Drake Thank you for the compliment. I don't know how interesting I would be as a guest on your show but I am willing to give it a go, I hope you're not disappointed When wrote poem I was in precisely that place I believe that there are many people, as they go through the various phases of their lives, face this same dilemmPlease let me know the next step Vic Pister

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/23/2013 8:08:00 PM

I'll Soupmail you and we'll talk. :)

Gerald Kithinji

Date: 9/23/2013 5:30:00 PM

...whispers of yesterday... today.

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/24/2013 7:58:00 AM

Indeed, thanks Gerald.

Cindy Lu

Date: 9/23/2013 3:33:00 PM

I felt the poem intensify and then the ending was tremendous. Speaks volumes.... Great work poet! Cindy

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/23/2013 5:27:00 PM

=D You're very kind, Cindy. Thank you!

John Loving Iii

Date: 9/23/2013 12:05:00 PM

Blissful closure and steadfast. I get it.

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/23/2013 2:24:00 PM

Awesome! Thanks, John! =D

Wilma Neels

Date: 9/23/2013 11:29:00 AM

Its refreshing to read a man encouraging and embracing a woman's independence Drake. Absolutely love this empowering piece of yours. ;)

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/23/2013 2:24:00 PM

Awww! :) That was the point of this whole piece. Thank you for getting it. =D You rock, Wilma!

Cherie Thomas

Date: 9/23/2013 9:02:00 AM

Drake your mind works like a puzzle, maze, a rubics cube LOL I like figuring out the right combination, it's a challenge & a rush to read. Really enjoyed!!!, Thanks for sharing....Cherie~<3

Cherie Thomas
Date: 9/23/2013 4:54:00 PM

Lol, me either Drake ha ha :0)

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/23/2013 9:13:00 AM

Good, at least you can value & appreciate my approach to the message. I don't cater to shortcuts in my style. There are too many of those in life today anyway, causing it to spoil some folks. For me, unwrap the gift, unwrap the layers, slowly. Thank you so much for this, Cherie. FYI, I could NEVER solve a Rubiks Cube. lol

James Marshall Goff

Date: 9/22/2013 8:11:00 PM

Wow! Drake! I can hear your voice reciting this complex art! as I now know your reading style very well! Great work! jimbo

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/22/2013 8:42:00 PM

My man, Jimbo!!! Thank you so much. =D

Monterey Sirak

Date: 9/22/2013 1:21:00 PM

So concise, yet with incredible power in every word. Masterfully crafted

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/22/2013 7:53:00 PM

Monterey, thank you so much for that. :) I think this writing was a bit necessary.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/21/2013 11:35:00 AM

oh my, powerful and tightly paced, drake... self-relaince is the most healthy way to live and is tonic for the soul...this woman is a tough nut to crack, and your lines express this so well-- raw and beautiful!..:) huggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/21/2013 11:57:00 AM

Spot on, dear Nette! =D Indeed, the woman in this piece is a toughie! Thank you so much!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/21/2013 7:41:00 AM

Wow..This poem is very deep..Its like a continuation of your previous poem..The IR regular heartbeat..the whispers in yesterday..The redemption of sin...So deep these thoughts.The ephmeral dance like a short lived sand wish and then towards the end-To swim through cashmere laden sands without the need of that raft.I guess that would be an independent woman indeed....Though that raft..She might be grateful for it...Excellent dream of non independent women penned.Love the voice echoeing.

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/21/2013 8:37:00 AM

You're quite right, yes. Thank you so very much, Charmaine. :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/21/2013 1:04:00 AM

love your metaphor and the part about her not having need of dependency's raft. That was cool!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/21/2013 8:35:00 AM

:) Yes, that line was an important one. Thank you so much, Andrea!

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/20/2013 8:57:00 PM

I love the following line, "AS she swims through cashmere laden sands" That is so descriptive and perfect for the description of this woman! She is truly special, I wonder if you met her would you date her? She is quite unique and beautifully put together...it's like you pieced together an special woman, I love this poem my friend! Great Work!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/21/2013 8:34:00 AM

I definitely would date her. There are things that turn me off. One of those things is a lady who won't stand up for herself. Because, to me, that tells me that we would be able to push each other through the hard times. There would be no fear or uncertainty that "love" would become one-sided. Many thanks, Russell! I'm glad you're feeling better!

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/20/2013 8:30:00 PM

Great poem Drake. I have always been very independent. Thanks for sharing and for your visit...... Lucilla

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/21/2013 8:31:00 AM

That is always a great thing to read. :) Keep that up! Thank you, Lucilla!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/20/2013 3:34:00 PM

stunning poem Drake a true portrayal of independency excellent pen Shadow x smile

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/20/2013 7:08:00 PM

Hey Shadow!!!! Many, many thanks! =D