In Vacant Time

Beyond a small stream’s margin lay we two
beneath a giant oak which spread sweet shade.
We barely knew what next we ought to do
there, pleasure-sated from the love we’d made
within deep foilage – on carpet lush.
The grass, which from the bank seemed to unroll
with wealth of buttercups and trim of brush
continued past us, up a gentle knoll.
Wrapped in one another’s arms, we pondered
how the rill, once sprightly, seemed subdued,
and how it once had rippled as it wandered
toward this sheltered spot of solitude.
Our brook, which kissed each boulder on its way,
in vacant time – with us – now sparkling lay.

Sept 10, 2020 the 'COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE (7)any form any theme' Poetry Contest of Brian Strand
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September 15, 2020 at 4:09 PM
You can always trust the man to ruin that moment by falling asleep :) though I do appreciate the after feeling you’re portraying here, combining the emotion to the slowing brook. Very clever. Take care, Richard
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September 13, 2020 at 3:57 PM
Such an enticing romantic piece!! Congratulations, Andrea, on your Top Win!!
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September 13, 2020 at 3:38 PM
Congrats on your placement in the contest. Very romantic work. Thanks for dropping by again on my incandescence poem. I commented again on your comment if you care to read it. Sara
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September 13, 2020 at 6:27 AM
There's a very serene, tranquil air pervading your poem through your words Andrea. Congratulations on your 1st place in Brian's competition.
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September 12, 2020 at 11:10 AM
Lovely romantic sonnet, Andrea, Congratulations on your top win!
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September 12, 2020 at 6:45 AM
An idyllic, elegant sonnet, Andrea. But should ‘book’ read ‘brook’? Or have I missed the point?
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September 12, 2020 at 7:49 AM
thanks for letting me know on the typo!
Dutta Avatar
September 11, 2020 at 8:22 PM
VERY NICE. Congrats to win Top as usual. Hugs.
Watt Avatar
September 11, 2020 at 3:16 PM
Gorgeous sonnetry my friend. Nice to see it acknowledged with a #1 win from Brian!
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September 11, 2020 at 1:42 PM
As usual lovely combination of words and thought.
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September 11, 2020 at 11:20 AM
Such a romantic spot, Andrea. Sounds lovely! Best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn
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September 11, 2020 at 6:04 AM
Enjoyed the tone and flow--lovely write, Andrea.
Lawless Avatar
September 11, 2020 at 4:58 AM
beautifully done Andrea...smoothly flowing with a little ripple
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September 11, 2020 at 1:35 AM
Hi Andrea. Flow of meter matches your pleasantly drawn glade. I just learnt the word rill, thank you! I sense the freshness of the brook. (r) Beautiful!
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September 10, 2020 at 11:33 PM
A beautiful romantic sonnet Andrea, greetings from Turkey, Wifi really slow. Good luck in the contest, hope you are well. Tom
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September 10, 2020 at 11:12 PM
Superb !
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