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In Vacant Time

Beyond a small stream’s margin lay we two beneath a giant oak which spread sweet shade. We barely knew what next we ought to do there, pleasure-sated from the love we’d made within deep foilage – on carpet lush. The grass, which from the bank seemed to unroll with wealth of buttercups and trim of brush continued past us, up a gentle knoll. Wrapped in one another’s arms, we pondered how the rill, once sprightly, seemed subdued, and how it once had rippled as it wandered toward this sheltered spot of solitude. Our brook, which kissed each boulder on its way, in vacant time – with us – now sparkling lay. Sept 10, 2020 the 'COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE (7)any form any theme' Poetry Contest of Brian Strand

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Date: 9/15/2020 4:09:00 PM
You can always trust the man to ruin that moment by falling asleep :) though I do appreciate the after feeling you’re portraying here, combining the emotion to the slowing brook. Very clever. Take care, Richard
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Date: 9/13/2020 3:57:00 PM
Such an enticing romantic piece!! Congratulations, Andrea, on your Top Win!!
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Date: 9/13/2020 3:38:00 PM
Congrats on your placement in the contest. Very romantic work. Thanks for dropping by again on my incandescence poem. I commented again on your comment if you care to read it. Sara
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Date: 9/13/2020 6:27:00 AM
There's a very serene, tranquil air pervading your poem through your words Andrea. Congratulations on your 1st place in Brian's competition.
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Date: 9/12/2020 11:10:00 AM
Lovely romantic sonnet, Andrea, Congratulations on your top win!
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Date: 9/12/2020 6:45:00 AM
An idyllic, elegant sonnet, Andrea. But should ‘book’ read ‘brook’? Or have I missed the point?
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Date: 9/12/2020 7:49:00 AM
thanks for letting me know on the typo!
Date: 9/11/2020 8:22:00 PM
VERY NICE. Congrats to win Top as usual. Hugs.
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Date: 9/11/2020 3:16:00 PM
Gorgeous sonnetry my friend. Nice to see it acknowledged with a #1 win from Brian!
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Date: 9/11/2020 1:42:00 PM
As usual lovely combination of words and thought.
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Date: 9/11/2020 11:20:00 AM
Such a romantic spot, Andrea. Sounds lovely! Best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 9/11/2020 6:04:00 AM
Enjoyed the tone and flow--lovely write, Andrea.
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Date: 9/11/2020 4:58:00 AM
beautifully done Andrea...smoothly flowing with a little ripple
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Date: 9/11/2020 1:35:00 AM
Hi Andrea. Flow of meter matches your pleasantly drawn glade. I just learnt the word rill, thank you! I sense the freshness of the brook. (r) Beautiful!
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Date: 9/10/2020 11:33:00 PM
A beautiful romantic sonnet Andrea, greetings from Turkey, Wifi really slow. Good luck in the contest, hope you are well. Tom
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Date: 9/10/2020 11:12:00 PM
Superb !
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