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In Thirty-Five Minutes

IN THIRTY-FIVE MINUTES The angels are rushing and running left to right, they are careful as wounded-soldier eyes plead as thirty-five minutes ago... - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Earth-quaking are the sounds. On the dance floor is a number of halcyon Romeo and Juliet swaying smooth under an umbrella of blinking lights: red and green. Clinks! Clinks from tossed liquor filled glasses with loud chats and laughter crowd the air when--- tenacious shakes strike and slip their ground. Spiky trembles trip on spines, pounds grip hearts as the mad shaking earth beneath brawls and growls. They wanted to jet fly but they are tight trapped to a web of disaster. Satanic is this villain. Outside, sleeping pipes spurt! Shocked current wires fire! Anxious buildings cracked! Worried bridge fell apart! Disturbed waves began their tidal rolls, higher and higher as they land the shore. Thunder and lighting rule the skies, sad helpless clouds cry and cry flooding everywhere... Passed the thirty-five minutes, stinky is the breeze ragged dirty doll-like bodies are strewn all around... _________________________________________________ Sponsor Debbie Guzzi Contest Name Death and Dying ++Placed 3rd++ O.E. Guillermo 9:27 pm, June 28, 2015
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Robertson Avatar
July 8, 2015 at 7:29 AM
Grim, Gruesome and to The Lord we all pray, we all sing, for what does this mean. Is it just a phase, or, are we truly living in the Last Days. Very well put together Olive Eloisa.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 9, 2015 at 9:04 AM
Milton, I just tried to describe a disaster which I had been seeing in the news lately.. Scary! thank you for your generous comment..Olive Eloisa
A. Sharma Avatar
July 1, 2015 at 4:35 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning write dear Olive!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 4, 2015 at 11:34 PM
Thank you Dr. Upma... :)
A  Avatar
June 30, 2015 at 11:54 PM
OLIVE, :) Congratulations on your win. SKAT LOVE
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 3, 2015 at 3:47 AM
thank you Skat.. =)!
Callus Avatar
June 30, 2015 at 3:46 PM
Congratulations Olive_eloi!:) What about chocolate~vanilla~strawberry ice-cream!!:) hugs // paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 2, 2015 at 8:23 AM
thank you so much PAul!!! I love strawberry cheese ice cream! :D! hurrrrrry!
Dietrich Avatar
June 30, 2015 at 1:11 PM
A great description of a tragic event, Olive. You made it come alive for us. Congrats on your awesome win.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 1, 2015 at 8:59 AM
Thanks much Andie.. =)~
Nunez Avatar
June 30, 2015 at 9:18 AM
Impressive piece...Congratulations on your fine win, Olive!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 1, 2015 at 8:58 AM
Thank you so much Kim.. _)! Kudos too..
Onclaud Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 12:15 PM
one rage of a write, eloi...your images capture nature 's havoc in a flash!.. wow naman.. thanks for the honor of pacing in you sweats and sweets contest!,,, huggs
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 30, 2015 at 8:19 AM
Thank much Nette.. =) I thank you for entering my contest.. hugs back too.. =)
Callus Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 8:30 AM
Sudden devastation turns happiness into pain and despair. Very well expressed; great imagery. No stopping nature when she's in an angry mood; then we realize how weak we are when compared to her!! Take care. // paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 8:26 PM
Thanks Paul ... I experienced earthquake in our place twice.. and yes i hope that as we hukan lok unto ourselves we also do this to mothr nature.. take care too.. ~Olive Eloisa
Fraser Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 5:06 PM
An earthquake captured splendidly in your words Olive. Such wrath must be a nightmare to live through. We do get tremors here in the UK, but we rarely feel them. Top marks for this gem, hugs always//your Huge One xx~xx
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 8:24 PM
James thanks for that power comment.. =) hugs back!~Olive Eloisa
Andresen Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 12:08 PM
- A total and terrible disaster at thirty-five minutes, dear Olive - An amazing and powerful, poem - (7) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 5:33 AM
Anne Lise I challenged myself in presenting the poem in a not so horrfying manner... thankbyou so much!! Hugs!:)~Olive Eloisa
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