In the Quiet of the Night

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In the quiet of the night, Where darkness steals the need for sight, When most are asleep, I lie awake, Waiting for the dawn to break, Long past trying to count sheep, My brain’s shallow, but my thoughts are deep, My mind’s trying to put the world to rights, But I think it might take ... several nights!

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Di11y Da11y

Date: 2/10/2023 7:59:00 AM

Nice work - I wonder if replacing brain with breath would work well though? (I've been thinking too much about meditation today!)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/11/2023 12:23:00 AM

Ahh I see. In my mind I was visualising panic and racing thoughts.

Clive Blake
Date: 2/11/2023 12:02:00 AM

Hi Dilly Thanks for your comment. Your suggestion could work, but I am trying to convey the fact that my brain isn't the biggest, but it is still determined to sort out all of the world's problems!!! If I were to change it to 'breath', people might think I'm just suffering from asthma! I might actually start meditating a bit though ~ Clive :)