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                           October 21, 2023

In the Land of Pretend

I'm okay, you're okay is a mask in the land of pretend.
Only by removing it will a heart and soul ever mend.
If you would dispose of your mask, I will do the same,
then we'll no longer need to point a finger of blame.

We've both been hiding behind one, concealing pain.
You see my eyes are red from tears that fell like rain.
I've kept you from seeing my frown by hiding my lips,
but I've longed to untie your veil with my fingertips.

Keeping my emotions hidden has been a poor disguise.
I've been a captain whose ship was starting to capsize.
It's finally time we end the facade and reveal our faces, 
for these disguises have been shielding what fear abases.

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Kim Rodrigues October 21, 2023 at 7:45 AM Great, Lin! Favorite lines: I've kept you from seeing my frown by hiding my lips, but I've longed to untie your veil with my fingertips. Lin Lane October 21, 2023 at 9:08 AM Hi Kim. Oh sweet… more favorite lines. Thanks so much.

Jeff Connelly October 21, 2023 at 6:29 AM Disguise and capsize is brilliant LIn. What a wonderful write. Thanks Lin Lane October 21, 2023 at 9:07 AM Hi Jeff. Thanks for the mention of what you particularly liked. Appreciated and you.

Jan Allison October 21, 2023 at 6:07 AM Thought provoking piece Lin I think all of us wear 'masks' at times and it can be difficult to let down our guard for fear of hurt. I know that humour is my own 'mask' :-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane October 21, 2023 at 9:05 AM Your mask cannot hide your good heart, Jan. You are a wonderful friend who’d do anything for those in need. Thank you for being such an encouragement to me in so many ways.