In the g'night of space

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There's a solar wind that's contained; in the night of space Shadows find nowhere to show; the inner light of space Impossible to touch, it leaves us; without a trace Frozen rings of breathing streams blasting the bright of space No room for contrite just beguiling hearts in this place Wall-less holding back no ones screams; in the g'night of space All around, will be found that heartbeats heard, do keep pace These stars are but infernos; within the blight of space A. Scorpio, target of archers bow sites' embrace Water that steams itself, of all desired sight of space

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Paige Hind

Date: 2/20/2024 3:34:00 PM

Mmmm... okay <3 Never did this form, so I am not sure...I'll have to try it sometime. You did well to me. ;)

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 2/20/2024 3:52:00 PM

Thank you very much! When you do give it a try I look forward to reading it!

Paige Hind

Date: 2/20/2024 2:44:00 PM

Oh, I get it now! Thanks!!

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 2/20/2024 3:16:00 PM

I found this poetic form to be very interesting apparently in certain circumstances or perhaps in every one the writer of the poem is encouraged to mention themselves in the final couplet. That's not really my style so this was as close as I will come. I'm not 100% certain that I'm getting this form correct. But I certainly am having fun with it ;) Regards A.S.

Paige Hind

Date: 2/20/2024 10:35:00 AM

You have such a brilliant mind, A.S.! I love how the archer 'bows'- 'water that streams itself'- wow, it's very unique. <3

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 2/20/2024 12:29:00 PM

Admittedly it might take somebody that follows astrology to "get this one". But I've always been fascinated at how Sagittarius' bow is targeting Scorpio ;) Warmly A.S.