In the Desert

I wandered restlessly in the desert as the sands of time blistered my weary feet. Then as the sun bled crimson and night’s coolness washed over me, I awoke! Again, that damn Sandman had snatched slumber’s deepest comfort from me. Written by 9/15/2014 by Andrea Dietrich for nette onclaud's "In the Desert" Poetry Contest
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Kiser Avatar
September 23, 2014 at 11:35 PM
That cracked me up! The sandman can be irritating sometimes. Good luck with the contest.
Nance Avatar
September 22, 2014 at 7:06 AM
Grats on your win, I enjoyed this even on second read, Hugs lady, you rock :)
Mohn Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 8:41 PM
Congrats...see, I knew you would shoe horn in ahead of me...LOL
Allison Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 3:54 PM
wonderfully penned Andrea many congrats on your win - love the twist at the end:-) hugs jan xx
Andresen Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 12:34 PM
- Truly a lovely winning poem,Andrea - Congrats with the 5th place in the contest ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Lindley Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 10:42 AM
Lost sleep is a real bummer... Enjoyed this well crafted write my friend.. Congrats on your win!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 12:35 AM
:) you making me sway with your poem Andrea.. :) blistered my weary feet.. that's so painful!!! see down some congratulations, :) i echo them as this indeed is great!
A. Sharma Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 12:24 AM
This is a fabulous write Andrea! Loved the imagery here, sand blistering the feet n sun bleeding crimson,, big congrats!
Trichet Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 9:03 PM
Congrats Andrea, you penned it well. A smile from me
Meier-Hans Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 7:46 PM
Stopping back with my congratulations Andrea.
Onclaud Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 3:20 PM
this has a big surprise in the end , andie...what a sudden shift that delights.. proud to have this in my contest... congrats and huggs
Lawless Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 9:33 AM
interesting take on the theme with another tricky form
Kayode Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 7:22 AM
Congrats Andrea on the win,this even looks like desert itself; I mean a concrete form.
Mehta Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 5:36 AM
The surprising end with a twist, Andrea. congrats
Mohn Avatar
September 19, 2014 at 8:54 PM
Love it Andrea...can't believe we both did Etherees on this...like yours better
Sirak Avatar
September 18, 2014 at 8:47 AM
Great images and a nice twist at the end as only you can do. Love it.
Hamilton Avatar
September 17, 2014 at 8:58 PM
lovely Andrea I know you like this form and this gem shines gl in contest hugs
Yvonne Avatar
September 17, 2014 at 5:37 PM
WOW!!!! The more I read this, the more impressed I am. This has to be one the best poems ever. Straight to my favs. Thank You Andrea I just felt my brain grow another grain.
Yvonne Avatar
September 17, 2014 at 5:33 PM
I think you were lucky that your words fit into your pyramid drawing. Worked out well. Like one syllable then two then three...all the way to ten. The best part is that the poem flows perfectly. Almost as if you were like really talented and wrote it to be exactly what it is. You know BRILLIANT!!!! Now I don't feel so bad missing the contest. I still posted it though. So you know, win win for me. I can always talk myself into believing I would of placed. " I coulda been a contender". ANDREA!!!!
Mcintosh Avatar
September 17, 2014 at 3:06 PM
Best in the contest Andrea... This is, like everything you write, a wonderful piece of writing. Words come naturally to some and I believe they do to you. Love and Prayers and God bless you.
Austin Avatar
September 17, 2014 at 2:08 PM
Outstanding, as are most of your poems. There was an old cigarette ad back in the 40s - I think it was the 40s - "I'd walk a mile for a camel." N ot on those feet you wouldn't, eh? Love, daver
Mcdaid Avatar
September 17, 2014 at 3:32 AM
very beautifully painted piece andrea
Richards Avatar
September 16, 2014 at 8:49 PM
Don't you just hate it when that happens? !! LOL...... Good one, Andrea!
Bordner Avatar
September 16, 2014 at 8:43 PM
Make not a desert of your heart Andrea. Amazing how extremes and crucibles chase after us in the day and night. You have a free and xool style woman. J.A.B.
Smith Avatar
September 16, 2014 at 8:19 PM
Always the case with me...can't remember the last time I slept in...hugs
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