In the Dark

The sunset clouds are pinks and greys
in tattered strips, in rips and frays,
in feathered flight at end of days,
in summer skies that fill my gaze.

And in the pines beside the sea
a hundred birds talk endlessly
and shooshing waves lap hungrily
as we eat fish and chips for tea.

Before the day turned into night
the pinks were burned by dying light.
The birds were still, the moon was slight
when day had gone and it was night.

And then my eyes could hardly see
the scenery in front of me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Hind Avatar
May 17, 2026 at 4:46 PM
This is amazing work!!
Messina Avatar
March 27, 2024 at 11:18 AM
A wonderful write, Jeanette. Love this! Congratulations on your top win in my contest. Sorry so late. Hugs Charlie
Swan Avatar
March 27, 2024 at 1:43 PM
Glad you enjoyed this evening on the beach with the kids. J :)
Scragg Avatar
February 10, 2024 at 7:05 AM
Wow! This is fantastic! Beautiful imagery of nature. Ending is brilliant too as it brings closure to your poem like the end of the daylight. :-D
Swan Avatar
February 10, 2024 at 11:58 AM
Thanks Natasha. I hope it reminds you of a happy time too. J :)
Rodrigues Avatar
January 30, 2024 at 7:34 PM
Love this Jeanette! Fave!
Swan Avatar
January 30, 2024 at 9:18 PM
So glad you enjoyed it. J:)
Delaney Avatar
January 28, 2024 at 5:13 PM
This is wonderful Jeanette: It brought back memories of Australia. It flows beautifully. Into my favs. SuZ
Swan Avatar
January 28, 2024 at 7:27 PM
Thanks SuZ :) happy memories, smell of the sea and pine together
Buhagiar Avatar
January 24, 2024 at 1:38 AM
Great emotions, imagery and diction in this poem. Well done.
Swan Avatar
January 24, 2024 at 1:46 AM
Thanks Victor for your kind comments :)
Evans Avatar
January 23, 2024 at 9:33 AM
Such a lovely write describing what enfolds around us, capturing our sights until we couldn't see anymore with the darkness.
Swan Avatar
January 23, 2024 at 7:31 PM
Thanks Marilene. I smiled when reading your ITQ because 'Before the day turned into night' took us to the same setting:)
Kendrick Avatar
January 23, 2024 at 3:19 AM
I like the rhythm, rhyme and flow of this one. You have described such a beautiful scene. I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing. Sara K
Swan Avatar
January 23, 2024 at 3:21 AM
Thanks Sara, memories of picnics at Collaroy beach when kids were young (stumbling back to the car).
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