In Shadow

He stands at the edge
Peering through the fence
The silence of solitude roars in his mind
Deep lines on his brow cruelly mimicked in steel
Black shadows lie on the parched sun soaked dust even as they lie across his soul
What evils must a man commit to protect his own
Somewhere the war rages on without him








Contest : Shadows and Lines 
9th Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 9/15/2011 8:35:00 AM
Part 2 He banks and dips. His large liquid eyes stare unblinkingly at the immense eye of the setting sun its face a broad flattened disk, wider at the sides as if caught in a vise of immeasurable proportions. Then thick ribbons of cloud of a metallic gray ride before it ghostly remnants of a once vast, victorious army, reaving it. [Glad you enjoyed the Bubble contest..I look for a unique perspective to judge]
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Date: 9/15/2011 8:34:00 AM
Part 1 The 1st paragraph of a most excellent short story or novella..[soft smile] feels very like prose poetry...I recommend you read The Sunset Warrior Cycle by Eric V. Lustbader..paragraph 1..book Two Soaring through frigid mists and rolling clouds, he stretches fully his long wings upon the unpredictable currents. Streamers of siver plumage, running bolaterally across his wings and cresting his majestic questing head, ripple in the wind.
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Date: 8/20/2011 12:05:00 AM
I am considering we are all innocent in at least one aspect. We base our beliefs on the information at hand. We react according to those beliefs. And we are all doing the best we know how to. It is inevitable, we must experience this. (just my opinions, please don't take too seriously :)
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Date: 6/30/2011 2:25:00 PM
congrats on your win with this exceptional piece.cory
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Date: 6/27/2011 5:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in ^Rick's "Shadows and Lines" contest Nick. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/26/2011 3:15:00 PM
Such a dark piece Nick, and best wishes on the win..
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Date: 6/23/2011 8:56:00 AM
Very deep and profound, Nick. Excellent! Congratulations on your fine win in Rick's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/23/2011 8:01:00 AM
Deep write here Nick.Congrats on your win.
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Date: 6/23/2011 5:27:00 AM
eeeie but fascinating… KUDOS to you for the special win, nick! :) huggs,
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Date: 6/22/2011 10:30:00 PM
wow, this makes me really wonder what has happened to this man to make such shadowy thoughts enter his being. Cool poem, NIck. Congrats on the big win.
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Date: 6/22/2011 2:39:00 PM
Congrats Nick on your fantastic win in shadows and lines contest with this superb entry my friend.. enjoy sweet victory again..luv..
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Date: 6/22/2011 6:03:00 AM
Interesting one..Leaves me with many questions..Sara
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