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In Response To My First Poem

AT THE FINAL GOODBYE The congregation mingled within the silent stone slabs of their ancestors, a final goodbye to yet another destined to leave this place. Yet to one, in this his profound sorrow an enchanting moment. He craved! With a soul sensitive and true to touch a living memory, his lips again to caress her symbolic smile. His need to glance upon her northern eyes of blue, stroke her flowing “Celtic Flame” That, while strolling in lanes of love rebelled against the moorland breeze. He desired to paint this memory of that moment the very first day they met, bestow in this a silent tribute to the emotions within their secrets, those, no one else could ever share! first posted 2nd may 2010 IN RESPONSE TO MY FIRST POEM Our secrets to keep forever The two of us only will share, This my darling is my promise To you so far away down there. Oh yes I can hear and see you From this my place far up above, I listen to your sweet whisper See us in your portrait of our love. Alas ‘tis only my bare bones That lay idle beneath your feet, Leaving everything about me In your memory this my treat. Our precious although short moments Forever lives on in my soul, Until one day yet far away The final end your earthly role. Then once again true love will meet Your need to touch my Celtic Flame, Mine to gaze upon eyes of green Our lips passionate wild untame! 28th Sept 2015 © Harry J Horsman 2015

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Date: 2/18/2016 9:17:00 AM
This is wonderful and lovely. Nice poetry here dear friend.
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Date: 10/20/2015 9:05:00 AM
My favorite comment is Demetrios's. Also thanks for entering my Questionku contest.
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Date: 10/17/2015 3:00:00 AM
Both of these poems are outstnding Harry. I especially love your response poem as it is the most romantic. I have to fave these beauties! Congratulations on your win! #7
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Date: 10/8/2015 2:11:00 PM
From free verse to rhyming quatrain...but the result is still the same....excellent! Secrets between two, I believe, can be shared again in an afterlife. #7 // paul
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Date: 10/8/2015 10:31:00 AM
Poems competing against each-another for attention, the winner: The poet himself. Excellently done, my friend, harry! A seven to each!
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Date: 10/7/2015 5:33:00 PM
Deeply touching Harry, love the response to your first poem, both are awesome. Congrats on your win! Hugs
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Date: 10/7/2015 12:13:00 AM
such a lovely poem, a response well adored, enjoyed this one:) pd
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Date: 10/6/2015 8:26:00 AM
Two wonderful poems Harry, and one well deserved win. Great stuff mate.
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Date: 10/3/2015 11:25:00 PM
When a loved one passes away they can sometimes take us with them... I do believe in my heart that a reunion is waiting after death... A tender and deeply moving response to your first poem. Beautifully written, Harry!
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Date: 10/2/2015 1:01:00 AM
Harry, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT
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Date: 10/1/2015 5:50:00 PM
Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 10/1/2015 8:46:00 AM
Wow! I just love this haunting romantic piece Harry. Your first poem was also amazing. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 10/1/2015 2:07:00 AM
Wonderful both poems Harry n so is the win! Big congrats!
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Date: 9/30/2015 10:07:00 PM
BOTH POEMS ARE FINE POETRY. A fine poetic pen inked these gems. Congrats on your win..
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Date: 9/30/2015 7:49:00 PM
Beautiful well-written poems. I can see the change in style from the old one. Thank you for sharing with us those moments! Congrats, Harry! hugs!
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:53:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Harry:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:35:00 AM
I am so enjoying this theme and you did this brilliantly.
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Date: 9/29/2015 9:34:00 PM
Both are excellent poems full of love and sad loss. Good luck in the contest! A7
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Date: 9/28/2015 5:09:00 PM
both have such beautiful yet sad imagery Harry. I particularly love the final stanza in the second poem - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx 7
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