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You might recognize the inference to the American folktale, "Rip Van Winkle."  In my poem, the old man comes alive to his surroundings and longs to pass down what he knows to the future generations.

though rather late, I woke up i might have thought I wasted time in nodding but what a wonderful dream I had the hoary woods crew danced on my eyelids sourced balsam scent and poppies the floaters fresh and cruel motivators i limp along, with a beard so long, and cane my knee’s bent, my pace slowing but shadow’s spreading as I part my lips, dandelion seeds sail through gentle waves of wind toward generation gaps the stories i will tell of flagons, empty dragon’s breath joy of open eyes how sunlight revives the tenderness of life implement the words of Solomon the wise

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Date: 7/5/2024 7:52:00 AM
I enjoyed the excellent use of imagery, and creative wordplay 'as I part my lips, dandelion seeds sail' ... Your final 2 lines draw it together with a positive philosophical outlook. Best. Suzette
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Suzette Richards
Date: 7/6/2024 10:15:00 AM
The new contest I posted will be a walk in the park for you, Kim :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/5/2024 3:40:00 PM
Thanks, truly, for taking the time to comment. I will try to get it right if I write for you another suzette prime! xoxo
Date: 6/25/2024 4:00:00 PM
Kim, Nice poem! I like the image dandelion seeds sailing across generation gaps. I also like RVW.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/25/2024 4:57:00 PM
Thank you, David! One of my nearby roads, growing up, was Spooky Hollow Road. I found it when I was lost after bringing a friend home, shortly after seeing a zombie movie…lol. Found the main road, mde it home…lol
Date: 6/20/2024 12:09:00 PM
Kim, I suppose we do want to provide the wisdom we've gained. Stories (and poems) are a great lesson giver. There's nothing better except experience itself. The old man does seem to understand something important.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 5:33:00 PM
Thank you, Duke!
Date: 6/20/2024 4:54:00 AM
Creative way to go with this contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your creativity with us. Your visit to my page with congrats was uplifting. Sara K
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:16:00 AM
You are so appreciated! Thank you, Sara!
Date: 6/19/2024 10:50:00 PM
Sleeping through several generations might be creepy. My first question would be, "where's the landline?" Your poem is very creative.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:15:00 AM
Who knows what the future will look like unless you think about what the future is…here we are ;)
Date: 6/19/2024 9:25:00 PM
Your amazing tale captivated me, Kim. Wonderfully written! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:14:00 AM
Makes me happy! Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 6/19/2024 2:47:00 PM
Really captivating tale in this Kim so good to Read through!!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:13:00 AM
Thank you, Joe! How much I appreciate!
Date: 6/19/2024 2:47:00 PM
You did this form so well Kim..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:14:00 AM
I really appreciate you saying so…was hoping! Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 6/19/2024 8:41:00 AM
Dear Kim, I love this story and your words beautifully echo the spirit of “Rip Van Winkle.” I can see and hear the old man awakening, longing to share his wisdom with future generations. - Blessings, My Friend - Daniel
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:13:00 AM
Thank you, Daniel! I lived near the Catskill Mountains. Fascinating tales! Blessings, dear one!
Date: 6/19/2024 5:38:00 AM
We all have dreams and lively ones too.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/20/2024 7:12:00 AM
All the best to lovely dreams, dear friend!
Date: 6/18/2024 6:51:00 PM
your poetic flair always engages, Kim...a most enjoyable read!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/19/2024 5:22:00 AM
Thank you so much, Nette! Your encouragement is appreciated!
Date: 6/18/2024 4:27:00 PM
beautifully written , everyone must deliver a message or a few, enjoyed yann
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/19/2024 5:26:00 AM
Thank you, dear friend!
Date: 6/18/2024 1:40:00 PM
With age, in your instance, comes POETRY- :) and wisdom....I loved reading this piece of yours, your ways of describing understood emotions is flawless... a joy to read <3 xx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/19/2024 5:26:00 AM
It is fun to write poetry through life experience and perspective. God bless you,Paige!

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