Notes About The Poem

You might recognize the inference to the American folktale, "Rip Van Winkle."  In my poem, the old man comes alive to his surroundings and longs to pass down what he knows to the future generations.

In Nodding

though rather late, I woke up
i might have thought I wasted time in nodding
but what a wonderful dream I had

the hoary woods crew
danced on my eyelids
sourced balsam scent and poppies
the floaters
fresh and cruel motivators

i limp along, with a beard so long, and cane
my knee’s bent, my pace slowing
but shadow’s spreading
as I part my lips, dandelion seeds sail
through gentle
waves of wind toward
generation gaps
the stories

i will tell of flagons, empty dragon’s breath
joy of open eyes
how sunlight revives the tenderness of life
implement the words of Solomon the wise
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Richards Avatar
July 5, 2024 at 7:52 AM
I enjoyed the excellent use of imagery, and creative wordplay 'as I part my lips, dandelion seeds sail' ... Your final 2 lines draw it together with a positive philosophical outlook. Best. Suzette
Richards Avatar
July 6, 2024 at 10:15 AM
The new contest I posted will be a walk in the park for you, Kim :)
Rodrigues Avatar
July 5, 2024 at 3:40 PM
Thanks, truly, for taking the time to comment. I will try to get it right if I write for you another suzette prime! xoxo
Crandall Avatar
June 25, 2024 at 4:00 PM
Kim, Nice poem! I like the image dandelion seeds sailing across generation gaps. I also like RVW.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 25, 2024 at 4:57 PM
Thank you, David! One of my nearby roads, growing up, was Spooky Hollow Road. I found it when I was lost after bringing a friend home, shortly after seeing a zombie movie…lol. Found the main road, mde it home…lol
Beaufort Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 12:09 PM
Kim, I suppose we do want to provide the wisdom we've gained. Stories (and poems) are a great lesson giver. There's nothing better except experience itself. The old man does seem to understand something important.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 5:33 PM
Thank you, Duke!
Kendrick Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 4:54 AM
Creative way to go with this contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your creativity with us. Your visit to my page with congrats was uplifting. Sara K
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:16 AM
You are so appreciated! Thank you, Sara!
Greenhough Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 10:50 PM
Sleeping through several generations might be creepy. My first question would be, "where's the landline?" Your poem is very creative.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:15 AM
Who knows what the future will look like unless you think about what the future is…here we are ;)
Buehler Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 9:25 PM
Your amazing tale captivated me, Kim. Wonderfully written! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:14 AM
Makes me happy! Hugs ~ Kim
Maverick Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 2:47 PM
Really captivating tale in this Kim so good to Read through!!
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:13 AM
Thank you, Joe! How much I appreciate!
One Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 2:47 PM
You did this form so well Kim..
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:14 AM
I really appreciate you saying so…was hoping! Hugs ~ Kim
Rodgers Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 8:41 AM
Dear Kim, I love this story and your words beautifully echo the spirit of “Rip Van Winkle.” I can see and hear the old man awakening, longing to share his wisdom with future generations. - Blessings, My Friend - Daniel
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:13 AM
Thank you, Daniel! I lived near the Catskill Mountains. Fascinating tales! Blessings, dear one!
Buhagiar Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 5:38 AM
We all have dreams and lively ones too.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 7:12 AM
All the best to lovely dreams, dear friend!
Onclaud Avatar
June 18, 2024 at 6:51 PM
your poetic flair always engages, Kim...a most enjoyable read!
Rodrigues Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 5:22 AM
Thank you so much, Nette! Your encouragement is appreciated!
Rolland Avatar
June 18, 2024 at 4:27 PM
beautifully written , everyone must deliver a message or a few, enjoyed yann
Rodrigues Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 5:26 AM
Thank you, dear friend!
Hind Avatar
June 18, 2024 at 1:40 PM
With age, in your instance, comes POETRY- :) and wisdom....I loved reading this piece of yours, your ways of describing understood emotions is flawless... a joy to read <3 xx
Rodrigues Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 5:26 AM
It is fun to write poetry through life experience and perspective. God bless you,Paige!
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