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In Disarray

Within the echo chambers of his mind distorted voices battle to be heard, familiar in tone yet undefined; connections faulty, messages now blurred. He struggles to remember yesterday as memories once vivid start to fade, ideas chaotic, thoughts in disarray; the fabric of his life distinctly frayed. But there within this helter-skelter space of mixed emotions wildly running free, just now and then his lips will faintly trace a whisper of the man he used to be. 20.11.19 'Disarray Poetry Contest' Sponsored by Nina Parmenter

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Date: 11/24/2019 11:53:00 AM
Oh wow. Potent, and beautiful in its rawness. Congratulations for your win Wendy. xomo
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Wendy Watson
Date: 2/21/2020 2:44:00 PM
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment,Maureen.
Date: 11/24/2019 4:07:00 AM
Hi Wendy congrats on your winning poem
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Wendy Watson
Date: 2/21/2020 2:43:00 PM
Thanks for reading and commenting, NA NA
Date: 11/23/2019 4:33:00 PM
So good Wendy, I loved every word, it is similar to what I was going to write but never did, yours is so well said, I suspect it may be true to life, if not you have great insight to the human condition!
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Wendy Watson
Date: 2/21/2020 2:43:00 PM
How kind, John. Yes it has affected the wider family and I tried to put myself in their bewildered situation.
Date: 11/22/2019 1:59:00 PM
If this is about dementia or alzheimers' I can certainly relate. Great idea!
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Wendy Watson
Date: 2/21/2020 2:40:00 PM
Thank you, Caren. I suspect that many of us will have had some link with this disease.
Date: 11/20/2019 5:23:00 PM
Beautily done! Good luck!
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Wendy Watson
Date: 11/20/2019 5:28:00 PM
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to give feedback,Ralph.
Date: 11/20/2019 7:52:00 AM
I really loved this, especially the final lines. I can relate to this wonderful poem. Best wishes in the contest Wendy.
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Wendy Watson
Date: 11/20/2019 5:28:00 PM
Thank you as always for your encouraging comments,Chris.
Date: 11/20/2019 7:28:00 AM
Well written Wendy! Have a nice day :)
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Wendy Watson
Date: 11/20/2019 5:27:00 PM
Thank you Heidi. I had intended to write a lighthearted poem but my imagination changed tracks.

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