In Death Throes

In death throes

Last of the hang-outs  is the cruelest one 
Hanging by tubes or not,  sadly in chains
Saying  bye while  leaving a lot undone

Though you've been through it all under the sun
Some of them carrying a lot of pain
Last of the hang-outs is the cruelest one .

It’s as if some one is holding a gun
To your head and you think  all was in vain
Saying  bye while leaving a lot undone

True it is that some of it was real fun
Which  but silently did leave you all drained.
Last of the hang-outs is the cruelest one

To turn the clock back, there simply are none
When futile with  illnesses  you are lain
Saying  bye while leaving a lot undone

When of no  use  are  kin and even son
And faculties are on a steady wane
Last of the hang-outs is the cruelest one
Saying bye while  leaving a lot undone.

19 Mar 14
Form: Villanelle
For Linda's My days are dark contest.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/17/2015 11:39:00 AM
Congrats on ur wonderful winning poem Jag! Great work!
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Date: 8/16/2015 9:52:00 PM
Hi Jag, Congrats on your win. ~SKAT~
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Date: 8/14/2015 7:12:00 PM
Jag, :) Congratulations on your HM. Stop by my latest blog "Poem for One Victim" if you'd like or have time. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/17/2014 8:36:00 AM
Powerful! Congratulations.
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Date: 5/16/2014 11:10:00 PM
Leaving me with questions. a lovely villanelle. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 5/16/2014 11:04:00 PM
Villanelle are so cool. Nice seeing you on the winner list with this one. Congrats, Jag.
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Date: 5/16/2014 8:51:00 PM
Lovely take on the theme and congrats on the win, nair
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Date: 5/16/2014 7:53:00 PM
wow jaggy, this is an emotionally heavy piece, and rather depressing, not something we want to dwell on! the rhyming is spot on throughout; a very strongly worded villanelle - congrats on your win in my contest, sweetie xoxo
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Date: 4/4/2014 4:47:00 PM
Very strong imagery! Sad too I hope all is well? Light & Love
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Date: 3/23/2014 10:47:00 AM
I am seeing that this is also in Julie's contest. Glad Leonora chose it. I am seeing it was your "latest" contest entry. Nice way to take the challenge and a sad thing to be in death throes. My stepdad was like this when he finally succumbed to alzheimers' complications..
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Date: 3/22/2014 7:45:00 AM
- Nice to read your "Latest Poem" in the contest sponsored by: Leonora Galinta :) - CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WIN, Jag. ! - Will also wish you an enjoyable weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/22/2014 7:04:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine win for your latest poem, jagath
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Date: 3/22/2014 6:30:00 AM
Congratulations on this great write and win my dear friend SJ. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your precious gem. Thank u so much for sharing and your loving support in my contest. Big warm hugs! Love lots, Leonora
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Date: 3/20/2014 9:04:00 AM
enjoyed the rhyme, and flow... Jag... wishing you luck..Linda
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