In Arms

Besides our promise brother in arms incarcerate – divide us mentally inside us with us – in our company killing time – they waste our lives Poison our present – sabotage sanity but friendship survives and as long as we are both alive brother in arms a promise will never die. end. 10/17/07 for kJ PLEASE COMMENT!! CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK, (pos. or neg.) CRITIQUES, OR ANY SUGGESTIONS I also enjoy simple lists of words, descriptors of an abstract reaction describe the feelings or ideas my poem invoked or left in feeling or thought. Even on word. is better than none. Thank you

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Liam Mcdaid

Date: 11/27/2014 6:09:00 PM

powerful piece of writing very beautifully painted joel

Joel Thornton
Date: 11/28/2014 12:24:00 AM

Thank yo so much for your feedback, it is the greatest feeling in the world for me to know someone read my words and it connected, affected, and or left an impression. It might seem a little selfish and juvenille to say, but I need to be validated as an artist, and a unique expressive human. That is why I needed this site. A place where my poems are being read. and a place where I can hear critique, feedback, praise, or initial reactions and comments after reading. Those are the best, the comments of their first honest reaction. So Much appreciated for reading, and even more so for commenting. ~Joel