Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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In a Shadowed Place

Another desolate day
the sun has dipped his face 
No longer will I have to pretend

My mind is astray
lost in a shadowed place
darkness has become my friend

Unable to convey
what I should erase
this heartache I cannot mend

How can I allay
the pains I embrace
when fear forces me to descend

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Emile Pinet August 20, 2017 at 5:08 PM Your words flow like a bubbling brook floating a message aimed at the heart. Well done! Emile. Lin Lane August 20, 2017 at 6:42 PM Thank you very much, Emile...for such encouraging comments

Darren White August 16, 2017 at 5:32 AM Beautiful tercets Lin. I love the length of the lines and how you chose your rhyme. And the content.... I can relate to it. Hugs. Lin Lane August 16, 2017 at 6:06 AM Hi there, Darren. It's nice to see your cute little penguin self and to read your kind comments. So I thank you.

Russell Sivey August 16, 2017 at 4:50 AM Yes! This fits exactly into a depressive state of mind! I've been there before, and hope to never go there again, it is such a dark and scary place, loneliness and sadness prevail! This is a wonderful depiction of depression, what a perfect poem with a wonderful rhyme scheme! Great Work Lin!! Lin Lane August 16, 2017 at 6:05 AM I always appreciate your lavish comments, Russell. Thanks so very much.

Dale Gregory Cozart August 15, 2017 at 12:56 PM The photo and the poem fit perfectly! Lin Lane August 15, 2017 at 1:00 PM Thank you, Dale. It's always fun to hunt for one that fits.

Frederic Parker August 15, 2017 at 12:39 PM there are only a few poets on this site capable of writing really sad poems, you are one of them, dear poet, rich in dark and sad contemplation Lin Lane August 15, 2017 at 12:46 PM Thank you, Frederick. Although my life is blessed with light now, I spent a year in a shadowed place that was not of my making. Your compliment about my ability to write sad poems is taken to heart and appreciated. I can create some pretty silly ones, too ;-)

Mike Gentile August 15, 2017 at 12:23 PM I found this to be exactly as titled, Lin. It made it clear to me that I do not want to stay to long! Lin Lane August 15, 2017 at 12:42 PM I don't want you to even visit such a place, Mike. Thank you.

Jan Allison August 15, 2017 at 12:17 PM Deep and so sad Lin it must be horrible for anyone who suffers from depression and to be in such a dark place in their mind:-( hugs jan xx Lin Lane August 15, 2017 at 12:21 PM It must also be terrifying. Let's hope we never reach that point. Thanks, Jan.

Anne-Lise Andresen August 15, 2017 at 11:56 AM - This was a sad and dark poem, Lin - Great described with deep feelings - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lin Lane August 15, 2017 at 12:01 PM It is, Anne-Lise, and I don't know how or why it took shape, but there is. Thanks.

Heidi Sands August 15, 2017 at 11:15 AM Lin, that is certainly a shadowy place you have described so well with your writing! Lin Lane August 15, 2017 at 12:00 PM Thank you ma'am. I hope I never find myself in such a forlorn place.