In a Bottle

to dream drift away 
in a bottle to journey 
where I want to play

so empty to be
In a bottle then I see
you in there with me
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Allison Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 12:44 PM
wonderful rhyming haikus that take the reader on a lovely journey:-) Hugs Jan xx
Ferguson Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 3:32 AM
awe thanks what a nice compliment
Mehta Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 8:08 AM
Nice rhyming in haiku, Cynthia
Ferguson Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 3:32 AM
thank you dr Ram
Ferguson Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 8:09 AM
thank you Maurice, it was a gift given me I like to return and grow
Yvonne Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 7:09 AM
A great read. Very strong delivery, a great write.
Ferguson Avatar
September 21, 2014 at 3:34 AM
thank you Maurice, sorry my last reply ended up in wrong box
Chakrabarty Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 6:49 AM
Very rich haiku. Use of "bottle" has heightened the intensity of the poems as it symbolizes life--contents in and out on its way to the unknown. Hugs!
Ferguson Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 8:08 AM
this is my challenge
Trifiatis Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 5:57 AM
What a lovely place to be when you are with the one you wish to be! Beautifully expressed, dear Cynthia!
Ferguson Avatar
September 20, 2014 at 6:05 AM
thank you, how fun it is to make a small empty space filled with imagination,
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