Jamie Grattan Poet Rhyme

Impress Me Iii,Setting Sail Philosophically

As the day transforms to night,
  My future expands, and I see light.
With determination, and refusal of fail,
  I feel the wind, and now I've set sail.
The air so fresh and easy to breathe,
  No stress or anxiety, I feel so freed.
Using every single mistake I have made,
  As a stepping stone, on the path I have laid.
I now see my trail as I carry on,
  Head held high, I'm proud, I'm strong.


Jayme
Philosophically speaking
Feb 05,14

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Robert Pettit February 10, 2014 at 10:58 PM Here, it looks as if you made a 180 degree turn from your previous poem. This is easy to read and understand with some good rhyming thrown in for quality enhancement. Jamie Grattan March 23, 2014 at 2:04 AM Hello, thank you kindly for your kind comment, which poem are you referring to, when you say previous? The 180 degree/ easy to read/understand, gives me the impression the other one was not.... now I'm curious. I appreciate constructive criticism thanks again, J-me

Dr.Ram Mehta February 9, 2014 at 7:28 AM Wonderful piece of a poem, congrats on the win, jammie Jamie Grattan February 10, 2014 at 3:52 AM Thank you! Luv J

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2014 at 7:38 PM Winner List: Impress me III! (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio V. are posted and I will: Congratulate you with your winning poem,Jamie !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Jamie Grattan February 10, 2014 at 3:56 AM Mwah, Anne-Lise, Thank you for taking the time to congratulate me.....xoxox J