Immortal Pain

The heart I had,
	The feelings I possessed,
	Are now in vain,
	As my heart is in pain.

	The glowing cheer died,
	My heart now cried,
	But the emotions I show,
	Makes my heart bow.

	The crack that widens inside,
	Is getting more and more wide,
	No one feel that from outside,
	And no one intends to get inside.

	My sun has set in my heart,
	Feelings to live more depart,
	But I need to live,
	For the great contribution I should give...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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June 23, 2016 at 10:34 PM
Karnik, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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June 17, 2016 at 1:47 AM
Definitely a 7 very powerful piece here feel free to check out my work especially. Internal Pain which i think you'll like
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June 16, 2016 at 5:46 PM
This is such a great way to start the soup... Welcome aboard. Skat
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