Immersion

The fog lay muffling the greenery gray.
Weighing down the atmosphere, sentient sorrowing,
with the benevolent masking intent 
of Gaia’s heart.

Dampening, the forceful sound;
the torrent of the Mothers tears;
battering only the granite walls of her womb.
The indistinct tone hid a multiplicity of sin
both visual and auditory, keening.

The cloak covered a miasma 
of valley-trapped pollution, 
engulfing the optical plane;
creating a haven of rampant peacefulness.

Life immersed in the cleansing, the sorrow, the joy
of the universal gift bows in adulation 
of the effluent and affluent beauty 
absorbing the storms C tonal ring.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Ahmad Avatar
June 14, 2009 at 10:33 PM
It is beautiful, more than words.... to comment on this, one needs to write a reply-poem for this. I wish I could, but I dont think I can match your intelligence. It is, indeed, a great work!!!!!
Strand Avatar
June 14, 2009 at 12:22 AM
Your L1 one is a beautiful poem/picture in itself Debbie.Thank you for your welcome comments on my poeting today.Rgds Brian
Ilagan Avatar
June 10, 2009 at 3:44 PM
A reply on your comment: The Amerikan Haiku Association does not advise modern contemporary haikus in English to follow the 5-7-5 scheme. It need not be about nature. Google it ^_^
Chircop Avatar
June 10, 2009 at 1:19 PM
AWESOME WRITE AS ALWAYS---------CHARMA
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