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I'M Down Here

I'm down here God, one small face in the sea of faces looking up to see you, feel you and love you. I'm one small speck of sand on the endless beaches of this world hoping to be noticed by you. I'm fighting, dodging, ducking the snares of this world to be worthy of your notice. Do you see me God? Do you feel my love? Can you hear me over the waves upon waves of prayers, shouts, cries and praise coming your way? Will you remember me God over the glorious memories of Adam, Noah, Moses and Job? Over the triumphs of Mary, David, the Apostles and Jesus? I'm down here God, loving, fearing, reaching for you. I'm down here waiting for your return. I'm down here but I pray to be with you at the end of my days. Remember me God when I leave this world. Make a place for me... up there. Whitman-Inspired Uplifting Poetry, old or new Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Carolyn Devonshire 1/6/20

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Date: 1/20/2020 2:43:00 PM
Tim, I absolutely love the way you placed God in your entry. I didn't read all of the entries, but none of those I read mentioned God at all -- myself included. Thank you for such a touching and wonderfully wrought entry. Congratulations on you win!
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 1/20/2020 4:16:00 PM
Thank you so much Curtis for your kind words and encouragement
Date: 1/20/2020 1:59:00 PM
Your poem is beautiful, Timothy, but it reads more like an ode to God than an ode to a country. Some off-topic poems didn't place, but I think you may be comparing faith in God to love of country. The comparison just wasn't strong enough to be a true patriotic ode. Congratulations on your placement in the contest! Best wishes, Carolyn
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 1/20/2020 4:23:00 PM
Thank you for your perspective on this con test. I just wrote an uplifting poem as being down on Earth where I exist and reaching out to God. The poem is about me and my feelings toward God from where I live which is my home and country,
Date: 8/18/2019 2:46:00 PM
Hope he hears ya... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 8/18/2019 5:23:00 PM
I'm sure he will. Thank you Silent one.
Date: 6/7/2019 8:04:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win, Timothy :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 8/18/2019 5:23:00 PM
Thank you so much Sunshine
Date: 6/6/2019 1:52:00 PM
A beautiful hymn...Congrats on your win Timothy...
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 6/6/2019 3:23:00 PM
Thank you Joseph!
Date: 11/5/2018 12:37:00 AM
Sincere congratulations for your awesome win in LuLoo's contest, Timothy - blessings and best wishes - keep up the great work, my friend! :-)
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 11/5/2018 1:27:00 AM
Thank.you Gregory!
Date: 10/29/2018 9:28:00 AM
Congrats Timothy-- this would make a nice prayer
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 10/29/2018 1:20:00 PM
Thank you LJ
Date: 10/28/2018 5:53:00 PM
Back with well deserved congrats on your top win, Timothy.
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 10/28/2018 7:41:00 PM
Thank you very much Line. <3
Date: 10/28/2018 11:52:00 AM
it's all we an hope for, for Him to save us a place. beautifully expressed...Thank you and congratulations on your placement. -luloo :)
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 10/28/2018 12:11:00 PM
Thank you Lu!
Date: 7/7/2018 9:58:00 AM
I think you've got a place reserved up there for you for sure, Timothy. No rush though.
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Timothy Mcguire
Date: 7/12/2018 2:40:00 AM
I agree no rush! :)

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