Timothy Mcguire Poet Ode

I'M Down Here

I'm down here God, 
one small face in the sea of faces looking up to see you, 
feel you and love you. 
I'm one small speck of sand on the endless beaches of this world hoping to be noticed by you. 
I'm fighting, dodging, ducking the snares of this world to be worthy of your notice. 
Do you see me God? 
Do you feel my love? 
Can you hear me over the waves upon waves of prayers, shouts, cries and praise coming your way? 
Will you remember me God over the glorious memories of Adam, Noah, Moses and Job? 
Over the triumphs of Mary, David, the Apostles and Jesus? 
I'm down here God, loving, fearing, reaching for you. 
I'm down here waiting for your return. 
I'm down here but I pray to be with you at the end of my days. 
Remember me God when I leave this world. 
Make a place for me... 
up there.

Whitman-Inspired Uplifting Poetry, old or new Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Carolyn Devonshire
1/6/20

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Curtis Moorman January 20, 2020 at 2:43 PM Tim, I absolutely love the way you placed God in your entry. I didn't read all of the entries, but none of those I read mentioned God at all -- myself included. Thank you for such a touching and wonderfully wrought entry. Congratulations on you win! Timothy Mcguire January 20, 2020 at 4:16 PM Thank you so much Curtis for your kind words and encouragement

Carolyn Devonshire January 20, 2020 at 1:59 PM Your poem is beautiful, Timothy, but it reads more like an ode to God than an ode to a country. Some off-topic poems didn't place, but I think you may be comparing faith in God to love of country. The comparison just wasn't strong enough to be a true patriotic ode. Congratulations on your placement in the contest! Best wishes, Carolyn Timothy Mcguire January 20, 2020 at 4:23 PM Thank you for your perspective on this con test. I just wrote an uplifting poem as being down on Earth where I exist and reaching out to God. The poem is about me and my feelings toward God from where I live which is my home and country,

Silent One August 18, 2019 at 2:46 PM Hope he hears ya... Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Timothy Mcguire August 18, 2019 at 5:23 PM I'm sure he will. Thank you Silent one.

Anne-Lise Andresen June 7, 2019 at 8:04 AM - Congratulations on your win, Timothy :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Timothy Mcguire August 18, 2019 at 5:23 PM Thank you so much Sunshine

Joseph May June 6, 2019 at 1:52 PM A beautiful hymn...Congrats on your win Timothy... Timothy Mcguire June 6, 2019 at 3:23 PM Thank you Joseph!

Gregory Richard Barden November 5, 2018 at 12:37 AM Sincere congratulations for your awesome win in LuLoo's contest, Timothy - blessings and best wishes - keep up the great work, my friend! :-) Timothy Mcguire November 5, 2018 at 1:27 AM Thank.you Gregory!

L. J. Carber October 29, 2018 at 9:28 AM Congrats Timothy-- this would make a nice prayer Timothy Mcguire October 29, 2018 at 1:20 PM Thank you LJ

Line Gauthier October 28, 2018 at 5:53 PM Back with well deserved congrats on your top win, Timothy. Timothy Mcguire October 28, 2018 at 7:41 PM Thank you very much Line. <3

Beautiful Scars October 28, 2018 at 11:52 AM it's all we an hope for, for Him to save us a place. beautifully expressed...Thank you and congratulations on your placement. -luloo :) Timothy Mcguire October 28, 2018 at 12:11 PM Thank you Lu!

Line Gauthier July 7, 2018 at 9:58 AM I think you've got a place reserved up there for you for sure, Timothy. No rush though. Timothy Mcguire July 12, 2018 at 2:40 AM I agree no rush! :)