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I'Ll Have Another, and Keep'Em Comin'

In awe and angst, my Mind exploding-
Near to truth, but nothing knowing! 
In Sadness sought, my Soul is sewing;
Weaving woes my Heart bestowing 
Exhausted brain, too drained for thinking, 
For in Wells of Worry I am sinking...
I might as well just keep on drinking-
And all around me, Poets singing
Songs of old and tunes of yore-
Words that torch me to my core
One more draught, dropped to the floor,
And I can hear their Hymns no more...

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~JustLivingLies

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Sophia Valentina Date: 2/3/2014 7:42:00 PM I saved this as a favorite... Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 2/4/2014 9:51:00 AM Line 5 is weak and problematic; any suggestions?

Carol Eastman Date: 11/2/2013 1:58:00 PM Bravo! I'll be back frequently for more! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 11/2/2013 2:07:00 PM Thanks, Carol; I appreciate that :)

Robin Davis Date: 10/30/2013 4:56:00 PM Chan The Man Of course you would write something this silly and crazy. Drinking so much you pass out. BAD BOY !! LOL Thanks for the nice comment on my Accept Me poem. Hugs Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:57:00 AM I used to drink like a fish but I'm better these days ;) Thanks, Sweet Pea! <3

Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/29/2013 9:52:00 AM Very clever and I really like how it flows! Pour me another! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/29/2013 11:08:00 AM Will do, my friend! Thanks for stopping by a for the review :)

Laura Breidenthal Date: 10/28/2013 2:35:00 PM I certainly enjoy your rhyming and wit throughout. Very nicely structure and a great pleasure to read. :) We can sure get and feel so lost when it comes to alcohol and a part of us sometimes wants to be lost, but it aint worth it... Always, Laura Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/28/2013 2:38:00 PM Thanks for stopping by and for the read and review, Laura. I very much appreciate it :)

Dan Kearley Date: 10/28/2013 1:40:00 PM Ironic indeed... I turned the computer on and started writing. Then I read it after I posted it and saw yours? That has been happening to me a lot lately? Yea... I've been trying to stay away from that train. But when it comes a calling, it's hard to ignore that damn whistle! :o) Nice write... Thanks for the comment. Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/28/2013 2:01:00 PM Thanks for stopping by and for the review; enjoyed your work! :)

Eileen Manassian Date: 10/28/2013 1:28:00 PM Lovely...Very interesting....Nostalgia written all over the place. Thanks ever so much for your visit to my work! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/28/2013 2:01:00 PM Thanks for the read and review; enjoyed reading your work :)

Charmaine Chircop Date: 10/28/2013 1:11:00 PM I really enjoyed your beautiful poem -Charma Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/28/2013 1:14:00 PM Thank you, Charma; it makes me happy that you enjoyed it :)