Just That Archaic Poet Poet Rhyme

I'Ll Have Another, and Keep'Em Comin'

In awe and angst, my Mind exploding-
Near to truth, but nothing knowing! 
In Sadness sought, my Soul is sewing;
Weaving woes my Heart bestowing 
Exhausted brain, too drained for thinking, 
For in Wells of Worry I am sinking...
I might as well just keep on drinking-
And all around me, Poets singing
Songs of old and tunes of yore-
Words that torch me to my core
One more draught, dropped to the floor,
And I can hear their Hymns no more...

*Pardon Me, Did you Just...Contest Entry
~JustLivingLies

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Sophia Valentina February 3, 2014 at 7:42 PM I saved this as a favorite... Just That Archaic Poet February 4, 2014 at 9:51 AM Line 5 is weak and problematic; any suggestions?

Carol Eastman November 2, 2013 at 1:58 PM Bravo! I'll be back frequently for more! Just That Archaic Poet November 2, 2013 at 2:07 PM Thanks, Carol; I appreciate that :)

Robin Davis October 30, 2013 at 4:56 PM Chan The Man Of course you would write something this silly and crazy. Drinking so much you pass out. BAD BOY !! LOL Thanks for the nice comment on my Accept Me poem. Hugs Just That Archaic Poet October 31, 2013 at 8:57 AM I used to drink like a fish but I'm better these days ;) Thanks, Sweet Pea! <3

Richard Lamoureux October 29, 2013 at 9:52 AM Very clever and I really like how it flows! Pour me another! Just That Archaic Poet October 29, 2013 at 11:08 AM Will do, my friend! Thanks for stopping by a for the review :)

Laura Breidenthal October 28, 2013 at 2:35 PM I certainly enjoy your rhyming and wit throughout. Very nicely structure and a great pleasure to read. :) We can sure get and feel so lost when it comes to alcohol and a part of us sometimes wants to be lost, but it aint worth it... Always, Laura Just That Archaic Poet October 28, 2013 at 2:38 PM Thanks for stopping by and for the read and review, Laura. I very much appreciate it :)

Dan Kearley October 28, 2013 at 1:40 PM Ironic indeed... I turned the computer on and started writing. Then I read it after I posted it and saw yours? That has been happening to me a lot lately? Yea... I've been trying to stay away from that train. But when it comes a calling, it's hard to ignore that damn whistle! :o) Nice write... Thanks for the comment. Just That Archaic Poet October 28, 2013 at 2:01 PM Thanks for stopping by and for the review; enjoyed your work! :)

Eileen Manassian October 28, 2013 at 1:28 PM Lovely...Very interesting....Nostalgia written all over the place. Thanks ever so much for your visit to my work! Just That Archaic Poet October 28, 2013 at 2:01 PM Thanks for the read and review; enjoyed reading your work :)

Charmaine Chircop October 28, 2013 at 1:11 PM I really enjoyed your beautiful poem -Charma Just That Archaic Poet October 28, 2013 at 1:14 PM Thank you, Charma; it makes me happy that you enjoyed it :)