If only you knew

On the eve of that somber, stormy night,
I began to see strings of spring swirling soundlessly
along the thread-thin blade of this culinary cutlery.
Why does gravity lay on thick in this silver steel accessory?
If only you knew, where there is a subtle screech of harmony,
there is a violent war viciously humming melancholy.
As the dust of what was once obscure drops from the passing clouds,
it sets in an assembly of soft, dull vowels,
waiting for the rug of grass to spread a path to the furthest mountain.
Why do I feel no raging colors from the twilight
yet see them so vibrantly?
How do I know nothing of summoning my movements,
when this adrenaline speaks distantly?
Alone, a rush of flame once formed, now shows the demons in the storm.
When this flesh and bones become one with the unpredictable elements,
I hope what prevails is the lore of my regiments,
where I bled into the disasters of my own shortcomings,
learning to rest without a bruise as I drown.

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Date: 7/30/2024 11:38:00 AM
I really love your metaphors. Raw, but very sensitive <3
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Date: 5/19/2024 11:01:00 AM
I see we have gone from a kettle to a culinary cutlery.. interesting.. There are a lot of emotions in your poem, which is a deeply introspective piece that uses rich, evocative imagery to explore the complexities of internal conflict and the delicate balance between harmony and chaos. Its thoughtful language and emotional depth make it a compelling and resonant work. I hope you dont have to go through that.. Congratulations on your placement
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Date: 5/19/2024 12:36:00 PM
Thank u brothaaa for picking my piece.. so happy you found beauty in it … like u said harmony n chaos..
Date: 5/18/2024 6:33:00 AM
Oh boy, is this a suicide poem? Or am I reading it wrong? Your alliteration is awesome and the conflict within: palpable and moving. Roar
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Lioness Onpaper
Date: 5/18/2024 12:57:00 PM
Hahah.. not really suicide … but kinda dark yes … how something towards that region is looking like … thank u .. um glad u enjoyed this piece
Date: 5/16/2024 9:40:00 AM
Wowee papi! Look at you posting again after like what? A decade? Haha! So good to see you write and those alliterations im sure silent one will love and also the way youv expressed using metaphors truly left me in awe captivates and touched! I felt the depth of emotions youv conveyed in the most eloquent manner. Especially the opening, and also the ending hits strong for me! I also love “ Why do I feel no raging colors from the twilight yet see them so vibrantly” just love that!!! Fave! BOL
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Date: 5/16/2024 9:45:00 AM
Awwwwn thank u papiii .. this comment made my day aeee .. um soo happy you liked this piece … I hope brothaaaa likes it as well aee
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