Get Your Premium Membership

If Only You Knew

Poet's Notes
(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like David Crandall.


5/13/2024 for If only you knew Poetry Contest sponsored by Silent One

I was lying in bed, unable to sleep, Thinking of troubles I'd seen in life, so deep. If I could give counsel to the younger Dave, From so many disasters, him I could still save. Somewhere, in bed, many years and miles away, A boy asked, "Mom, why put me in bed - it's day?" He couldn't sleep, 'cuz outside it was still light He heard an old man's voice, as day turned to night,   "Young boy, I need not lament, 'if only you knew', Because, if you listen, I'll tell it to you. It took me quite some time to figure it out - I come to you through a twisted space-time route." The boy said, "crazy old man", to the wormhole voice, "are you trying to say that I have a choice?"  "Sure", creaked the geezer, "how your life goes will depend On the choices you make - from the start to the end. Pick your lovers, just as you would pick your friends. Choosing the right career will pay dividends - Take the Microsoft offer in eighty-two. You'll have so much money, you won't know what to do!" "You are right", said the boy, "I do have a choice. But I won't make it on the advice of a voice."   The old man then thought, "I was always a dope, Ready to hang myself, given enough rope."

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 5/19/2024 11:12:00 AM
You have a great imagination.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Login to Reply
Crandall Avatar
David Crandall
Date: 5/19/2024 11:37:00 AM
Thanks for the placement and praise, Silent One! Insomnia helps (lol)
Date: 5/13/2024 3:26:00 PM
creative take on the contest--one I liked especially with the humorous twist at the end. Have a great evening, Sara
Login to Reply
Crandall Avatar
David Crandall
Date: 5/13/2024 6:57:00 PM
Thanks Sara, have a great evening!

Book: Reflection on the Important Things