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If my loving presence does not warm you, If it does not dry your wet tears away, Then I have wasted each new breath I drew To sustain my life on this offered day. If you cannot retrieve your happy face Amongst the love-grown life we two do share Or amid the rhythm of our joined heart's pace, Then my emotions may collapse from scare. As the pillow where you can rest your head, As the balm to comfort your painful ache, As the light dimming fear of all you dread, I want to make your sadness flee or break. If I cannot be all these things and more, Then I feel trapped in a room with no door. English Sonnet September 1, 2016

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Date: 9/13/2016 5:14:00 PM
Your English Sonnet was awesome, creative and unique..Congratulations on your placement..Sara
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Date: 9/11/2016 9:00:00 PM
Congratulations, CayCay. You captured those feelings really well.
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Date: 9/11/2016 3:15:00 PM
Loyalty and devotion really do count, CayCay -- as long as they are genuine and (somewhat) reciprocated. Great sonnet. Congrats on your win! :-)
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Date: 9/11/2016 2:02:00 PM
CayCay, such a beautiful sonnet lovely lady, congratulations on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
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Date: 9/10/2016 6:53:00 PM
CayCay, congratulations on your 2nd place win, beautiful written . Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/2/2016 10:19:00 PM
AH so sweet and beautiful, that last verse, heart wrenching, if only there was more of you in this world! hugs!
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Date: 9/2/2016 9:47:00 AM
Very well penned emotional sonnet CayCay - the final lines especially choked me - the final lines evoked such a feeling of desperation:-( hugs Jan xx
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 9/2/2016 10:00:00 AM
Thank you, grand coug, I mean lady! We tease well together, eh? I am so glad you found emotion well penned in my Sonnet. Dunna worry because I drew on feelings from a relationship in my early 20s to write it ... Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 9/2/2016 5:19:00 AM
Nice thoughts ... close feelings ... and those in enjoyable poetical lines ...
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 9/2/2016 6:49:00 AM
Thank you so much, Probir ... CayCay
Date: 9/1/2016 8:49:00 PM
Lovely sonnet CayCay. Full of heartfelt emotion. I really love it. I wish I could find someone that felt that way about me.
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 9/1/2016 10:07:00 PM
When I was going thru depression, I longed for someone, but realized they weren't going to fall thru my ceiling. Join social groups you can find on the internet for various activities??? I was too lethargic to do so, but it is a viable idea. I'm glad you liked the poem. I hold you in the light daily, Daniel ... CayCay