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Ice Particles Fall

ice particles fall sadness camouflaged by sleet.... winter’s frozen tears *For Charles Henderson's "Strict Haiku 2" contest

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Eiken Laan

Date: 1/13/2011 2:38:00 AM

Carolyn, What a beauty, I feel the coldness and sadness in this, wow:))

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/9/2011 7:53:00 AM

i've been there. in the rain. not stoping the tears. my darkest hour. john

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/8/2011 11:18:00 PM

Darn! I missed this, Carolyn! Fantastic imagery portrayed in this! I sent you an email as I thought we were down once more! lol I was so wrong..just some minor glitch, I guess. Love, Audrey

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/8/2011 2:57:00 PM

I'm inside right now, but reading this one is making me shiver. How you have captured such clear descriptiveness in these few words is amazing.

Matthew Anish

Date: 1/6/2011 6:58:00 PM

You used the 5-7-5 scheme and I was glad to see that. There was a blizzard the other day here and more snow coming tomorrow. "Sadness camouflaged by sleet". Intresting thought. I just had a poem come out in the "Voices Israel" antholgy. Look foward to seeing your book! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

John Freeman

Date: 1/4/2011 9:24:00 AM

Beautiful Carolyn, should be a top winner, excellent images. Agape, Moses

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/3/2011 5:31:00 PM

excellent entry looks like a winner! Hope your warm and well. Light & Love

Wilma Neels

Date: 1/1/2011 8:31:00 PM

Carolyn, a great last line which makes for a stunning haiku ;-) good luck for the contest.. Love Wilma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/1/2011 1:00:00 PM

A nice metaphorical one, Carolyn. Good luck in his contest! Luv, Andrea

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 1/1/2011 11:37:00 AM

Great write, wonderful last line. I enjoyed the read, good luck in the contest. Caryl

Daver Austin

Date: 1/1/2011 8:16:00 AM

I'd never thought of it as "winter's frozen tears." Great line. Hope you had a wonderful holiday. Love, Dave

William Kershaw

Date: 12/31/2010 5:18:00 PM

Carolyn, Exquisite! Hapy New Year and may all your wishes be fulfilled. Love, Will

Lynette Chachere

Date: 12/31/2010 3:21:00 PM

very creative(: i would see why winter had frozen tears. . its so cold. ~Always&Forever Lynette

James Peranteau

Date: 12/31/2010 2:09:00 PM

This poem came right(write) on time my dear ! Noah and I built our igloo for the year....I hope ! *smiles* Great Haiku Carolyn ! much love, james

Gert W. Knop

Date: 12/31/2010 1:23:00 PM

Great Haiku, Carolyn! We here gots lots of snow and today it was snowing again. Prettey well done and best of luck for the contest! Love, Gert