Ice King

My skin petrified, mummifying my hand upon pools of brittle ice like curdled blood piercing veins: I watch the moon bathing its flesh, in crystal yellow, waxing a sheen... my pores dilate as cubes slowly melt when this fired orb heals from above till its velvet breath climbs into my head, extinguishing limbo of a daze…until I convulse in joy when chunk-stone changes into glimmered dew. *I held ice cubes on my palms and was transported back to scene of one night when a high fever drowned my senses… for some reason, viewing the glory of the moon relieved me from delirium… Ice King Contest of Skat ( in less than 10 lines) 25July2013 by nette onclaud

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/23/2013 11:35:00 AM

Creative winnning work..Uniquely you..Congrats..Sara

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/19/2013 6:01:00 PM

Enjoyed reading again, congratulations.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/19/2013 4:51:00 PM

Nette, a wonderful win... congrats in the ice king contest.. Linda

Brian Otoole

Date: 8/19/2013 2:42:00 PM

Congrats too on your great winning poem liked this a lot nice work much love Brian o

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/19/2013 2:09:00 PM

- It was nice to take part in this contest, I like your suggestion - very good poem. - Congratulations on a great win, Nette! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Skat A

Date: 8/19/2013 1:58:00 PM

CONGRATULATIONS, NETTE! Thank you for the Ice King Adventure...... Enjoy my latest blog "I got chills they're multiplying" inspired by all winning poems. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=495082#comments (-: Congratulations :-) ~SKAT~

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/29/2013 8:22:00 AM

I love where you went with this one. What an excellent piece you have crafted. I think SKAT will love it.

Bl Devnath

Date: 7/26/2013 10:25:00 AM

It's an excellent poem written from your practical experience. You have depicted a beautiful picture with wonderful realization by your magical words. It's my one of favorite poem enlisted today. Enjoyed a lot, my friend. Loved always, bl

Kash Poet

Date: 7/26/2013 8:46:00 AM

Wow!!This is outstanding poetry from you Nette.I love your approach here.

Daver Austin

Date: 7/26/2013 8:21:00 AM

The Moon puts a surreal touch to this opus, nette. My teeth chatter just thinking about it. Good, good stuff. Love, daver

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 7/26/2013 8:07:00 AM

Hi Nette, you make a mere ice cube look so lustruous,.. great !!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/26/2013 1:14:00 AM

chunk stone changes into glimmered dew-Its like a simple verse changes in the beauty you create sweet lady

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/25/2013 8:53:00 PM

"[I watch] the moon bathing its flesh," Wow, now that is a tremendous and wondrous line my friend! You have impressed me yet again with this phenomenal poem Nette! Interesting how you went back to that time of your life that was numb, where you barely felt anything...then the moon came to save the day, I can see that! I really loved reading this lovely piece this evening! What a powerful piece, Great Work!!