Ice Fall

Torrents fixed by natures’ breath glisten in the Winter suns mirage. Aquamarine copper infusions, opaque as opal, descend with abandon granite cliffs. scared by man’s iron tools. Stop action terrors frighten passing denizens of day. Tangling brush and briar. Frost glazing quartz outcroppings. The ground below shows silver shards snapped ice tentacles. Unfed forms heart breaking Ice.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/27/2010 5:32:00 PM

Deb, this one "feels' really cool. This kind of free verse I can pretty much "get" and I enjoy so much the imagery of it. I really like this one. If this one was in that contest for this form, I think you should have placed in the contest. (I'll talk to you more later in soup mail) Luv, Andrea

Matthew Anish

Date: 2/14/2010 9:07:00 PM

Interesting imagery - I especially like "Aquamarine copper infusions, opaque as opal" Keep 'em coming Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Eleanore Bourner

Date: 2/13/2010 6:07:00 AM

wonderfully done. i love the imagery! ------Ell

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/12/2010 7:12:00 PM

Great visuals Debbie and good luck if this is your entry for the contest ... these contests are surely a great avenue for expressions deep within us... luv.. Linda-Marie.. TWO SOUP MAILS...

Hyle Chu

Date: 2/12/2010 4:09:00 PM

scarred or scared by man's iron tools? Fossils and nature again. you're in a nature mood, huh.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/11/2010 2:42:00 PM

Heartbreaking ..cold ice.. i ve got the feeling indeed..Charma

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/11/2010 11:32:00 AM

Great expressive and descriptive write that you have presented in this Diminished Hexaverse. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara