Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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I Want To Make Your Mobile Immobile

Am I invisible... you almost knocked me flying
I’m on the pavement too, can’t you see me!
Too busy on your bloody mobile
Makes me seethe as you can see! 

Head bent, hell bent on concentrating
Your ‘ostrich’ bonce buried, phone in hand
Stop texting - look where you’re going
Or I’ll say words you WILL understand

Totally oblivious to your surroundings
Get a life you stupid ignoramus
Put down your friggin’ phone
Or I’ll whack you on your lardy anus

Written after being nearly floored twice today by men on their mobiles !

6/9/19

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Kaveesha Ruwindi June 24, 2019 at 8:55 AM Aargh! That thing! It is like a mania - no, it IS a mania. Y'know, I find plenty of people like that whenever I use public transport, always making me angry. Great poem that made me grit my teeth like I do when I'm angry :)

Gershon Wolf June 18, 2019 at 1:49 PM You lead the mobilization, Jan. I'll be right behind you. These kind of people need to get a life!!! btw, enjoyed your saucy tongue!! :) gw

Anne-Lise Andresen June 11, 2019 at 1:05 PM - No one has faces anymore ... all young people and adults look down on the mobile phone ... they texts even when they drive car or are on a bike ... madness ... - Where is a nice smile or hello on the street today ... we are too busy with our mobile phone - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Lindsay Laurie June 10, 2019 at 7:37 PM G'day Jan … shoulda done it anyone. This behaviour is close to number one topic in conversation these days - thank you Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison June 11, 2019 at 11:14 AM It's like an epidemic - being glued to a mobile device and too busy to look up - getting worse and worse especially when folk drive :-( hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman June 9, 2019 at 4:09 PM You speak for thousand of us, Jan..love this, truly a message.,. Jan Allison June 11, 2019 at 11:13 AM Thanks Harry, was chatting with a friend and he had exactly the same thing happen with a teenager as the kid was walking towards him so he he just stood in the pavement and let him walk into him ... the kid looked shocked he was there and hadn't noticed him:-( hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose June 9, 2019 at 2:59 PM Ah, that is so so sad, leave it to you to make light of a serious matter hon, I agree, people should take better care of where they walk, xo Jan Allison June 11, 2019 at 11:11 AM Its the fact so many walk with their focus on their mobiles and not looking where they are going:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 9, 2019 at 1:00 PM I am sorry, but it is everywhere. Those behind the wheel of a car are the ones I fear :( Jan Allison June 9, 2019 at 1:06 PM oh they are lethal in charge of a car, as are drunk or drugged drivers:-( hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian June 9, 2019 at 2:17 AM You poor sweetie! You should have told them a thing or two, Jan. Irresponsible people. I'm glad you are ok. Good vent. Thanks ever so much for your lovely visit to my page. I left a comment there explaining why I've been away so long. Love ya! Jan Allison June 9, 2019 at 1:08 PM Its both men and women/girls and boys they seem to be glued to these mobile devices without a thought for anyone else:-( hugs Jan x

Tom Cunningham June 9, 2019 at 12:58 AM They have certainly taken over Jan, it annoys me when youre talking to someone and they let their phone distract them, its so damn rude. Great verse. Tom Jan Allison June 9, 2019 at 1:10 PM thanks Tom:-) we went into a cafe in Malta, on the table was a basket to put your phones in so you didn't use them at the table - wish it would catch on!:-) hugs Jan x

Connie Marcum Wong June 8, 2019 at 8:57 PM Both sexes have their heads down looking at their phones. I was almost hit by a driver texting. I moved aside to the other side of the road and he ran straight into a light pole. Fortunately he was not going fast. Will he learn...I doubt it! A great poem to vent with! xxoo : )

Rico Leffanta June 8, 2019 at 7:59 PM Ha! Ha! Two young girls got on the bus this morning, both walking down the aisle looking at their smartphones and both falling on their face after tripping over walkers and feet! Did they learn from the experience? Not hardly! Aloha! Rico

Ilene Bauer June 8, 2019 at 7:48 PM it must have felt great to get this out and in such a poetic way, jan! i can totally relate to where you're coming from...

Caren Krutsinger June 8, 2019 at 7:30 PM This is the best ending to any poem ever written to date, Jan. "Or I’ll whack you on your lardy anus" Love it! Jan Allison June 8, 2019 at 7:34 PM lol Caren i wanted to have ignoramus in the poem and anus is near enough rhyme - hope it made you smile through your pain,shingles is horrid a friend has it so i can sympathise with you as I understand from her how painful it is, get well soon:-) hugs jan xx