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I Want To Make Your Mobile Immobile

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Am I invisible... you almost knocked me flying I’m on the pavement too, can’t you see me! Too busy on your bloody mobile Makes me seethe as you can see! Head bent, hell bent on concentrating Your ‘ostrich’ bonce buried, phone in hand Stop texting - look where you’re going Or I’ll say words you WILL understand Totally oblivious to your surroundings Get a life you stupid ignoramus Put down your friggin’ phone Or I’ll whack you on your lardy anus Written after being nearly floored twice today by men on their mobiles ! 6/9/19

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Kaveesha Ruwindi

Date: 6/24/2019 8:55:00 AM

Aargh! That thing! It is like a mania - no, it IS a mania. Y'know, I find plenty of people like that whenever I use public transport, always making me angry. Great poem that made me grit my teeth like I do when I'm angry :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/18/2019 1:49:00 PM

You lead the mobilization, Jan. I'll be right behind you. These kind of people need to get a life!!! btw, enjoyed your saucy tongue!! :) gw

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/11/2019 1:05:00 PM

- No one has faces anymore ... all young people and adults look down on the mobile phone ... they texts even when they drive car or are on a bike ... madness ... - Where is a nice smile or hello on the street today ... we are too busy with our mobile phone - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/10/2019 7:37:00 PM

G'day Jan … shoulda done it anyone. This behaviour is close to number one topic in conversation these days - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2019 11:14:00 AM

It's like an epidemic - being glued to a mobile device and too busy to look up - getting worse and worse especially when folk drive :-( hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/9/2019 4:09:00 PM

You speak for thousand of us, Jan..love this, truly a message.,.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2019 11:13:00 AM

Thanks Harry, was chatting with a friend and he had exactly the same thing happen with a teenager as the kid was walking towards him so he he just stood in the pavement and let him walk into him ... the kid looked shocked he was there and hadn't noticed him:-( hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 6/9/2019 2:59:00 PM

Ah, that is so so sad, leave it to you to make light of a serious matter hon, I agree, people should take better care of where they walk, xo

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2019 11:11:00 AM

Its the fact so many walk with their focus on their mobiles and not looking where they are going:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/9/2019 1:00:00 PM

I am sorry, but it is everywhere. Those behind the wheel of a car are the ones I fear :(

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2019 1:06:00 PM

oh they are lethal in charge of a car, as are drunk or drugged drivers:-( hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/9/2019 2:17:00 AM

You poor sweetie! You should have told them a thing or two, Jan. Irresponsible people. I'm glad you are ok. Good vent. Thanks ever so much for your lovely visit to my page. I left a comment there explaining why I've been away so long. Love ya!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2019 1:08:00 PM

Its both men and women/girls and boys they seem to be glued to these mobile devices without a thought for anyone else:-( hugs Jan x

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/9/2019 12:58:00 AM

They have certainly taken over Jan, it annoys me when youre talking to someone and they let their phone distract them, its so damn rude. Great verse. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2019 1:10:00 PM

thanks Tom:-) we went into a cafe in Malta, on the table was a basket to put your phones in so you didn't use them at the table - wish it would catch on!:-) hugs Jan x

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/8/2019 8:57:00 PM

Both sexes have their heads down looking at their phones. I was almost hit by a driver texting. I moved aside to the other side of the road and he ran straight into a light pole. Fortunately he was not going fast. Will he learn...I doubt it! A great poem to vent with! xxoo : )

Rico Leffanta

Date: 6/8/2019 7:59:00 PM

Ha! Ha! Two young girls got on the bus this morning, both walking down the aisle looking at their smartphones and both falling on their face after tripping over walkers and feet! Did they learn from the experience? Not hardly! Aloha! Rico

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/8/2019 7:48:00 PM

it must have felt great to get this out and in such a poetic way, jan! i can totally relate to where you're coming from...

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/8/2019 7:30:00 PM

This is the best ending to any poem ever written to date, Jan. "Or I’ll whack you on your lardy anus" Love it!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2019 7:34:00 PM

lol Caren i wanted to have ignoramus in the poem and anus is near enough rhyme - hope it made you smile through your pain,shingles is horrid a friend has it so i can sympathise with you as I understand from her how painful it is, get well soon:-) hugs jan xx