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I Still Owe Debt

I was with my lovely mummy traveling smiling face gummy saw a child not happy bunny asked for money, asked for money The guard blew whistle I not sieve felt he who lost all his life's ziv twenty five paisa tried to give I failed forgive I failed forgive The station's name I forgot yet his face in memory upset I feel pain when that is reset I still owe debt I still owe debt Note: This is real fact of my childhood life when I was traveling with my mom by a train. For the Monotetra Poetry Contest of Kim Merryman

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2013 4:29:00 PM

I really like your story, my friend. However, you need to rhyme all the end rhymes. I hope you can do it so you can be on the winners list. It's really a good one close to your heart.

Bl Devnath
Date: 6/25/2013 7:14:00 PM

Many thanks my friend for your kind help. I just tried it and it is my first one of this form. Loved always, bl

Kash Poet

Date: 6/25/2013 12:49:00 PM

Very touching story you have penned here bl.Enjoyed the read.

Bl Devnath
Date: 6/25/2013 7:15:00 PM

Many thanks for giving time to my page and for your comment. Loved always, bl