I Spy Eel Pie

'It seems surreal,'
whispered the eel,
'and I'm unsure
what that is for.'
He nodded then
towards my pen.
He wriggled round
without a sound,
and quite aghast,
he scribbled fast,
his mouth around
the pen I'd found -
and here I quote
the words he wrote:
'I am an eel
so here's the deal -
no jelly stuff *
(I'm far too tough).'
And then tight-lipped,
he duly flipped
into the sea,
and winked at me.
I waved bye-bye,
and floated high
above the crowds
who sat on clouds...

*jellied eel

for Nina's Surreal contest
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Watt Avatar
December 17, 2020 at 12:16 AM
Great one, Jack. Your rhyme and rhythm are spot on and your imagination is out in full force. This is the kind of dream I have after eating mushrooms that have gone bad. Enjoy your day ~ John
Kauffman Avatar
December 16, 2020 at 8:00 PM
This is "eely" funny, Jack. It has such amazing roots in Ogden Nash and Dr. Seuss. This would be a fun poem for kids (and those of us who don't plan to grow up ala Peter Pan):) They would love to put it into artwork! Congratulations on your win!
May Avatar
December 16, 2020 at 4:37 PM
Dropping back with my Congrats on your win..
Dietrich Avatar
December 16, 2020 at 4:11 PM
Very cool. I wish she would allow old poems . i have a few like this one that I'd love to show off again. BIG congrats on a well deserved win.
Y. Avatar
December 16, 2020 at 3:23 PM
Hi Jack, What a fun, clever and creative write. Congratulations on your win. Have a great day:-) Alexis
Pigeon Tart Avatar
December 16, 2020 at 2:23 PM
Fun engaging poem! Congratulations for your win Jack. xomo
Proxenos Avatar
December 12, 2020 at 11:09 AM
So creative, fantastic imagination and great fun - 'I am an eel, so here's the deal - no jelly stuff (I'm far too tough).' Love this write, when I first joined poetry soup I posted a poem called 'Enter Neolina', perhaps you will enjoy it'. Thanks for sharing this great write. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Callus Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 12:49 PM
Very cure and creative, Jack . I'm eely impressed :) Regards // paul
Kendrick Avatar
December 10, 2020 at 3:15 PM
Well, I think your imagination is running wild. LOL..Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for all the visits to my page. Sara
May Avatar
December 10, 2020 at 1:18 PM
Beautifully done, Winning wishes
Allison Avatar
December 10, 2020 at 12:42 PM
ha ha ha what a surreal poem indeed my friend, I cant imagine anyone eating eel and covered in jelly eww no:-) hugs jan xx
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