*4th Place* I miss Poetic Form: Sedoka Inspired: 2024 July 22 Contest Judged: 2024 August 08 Sponsored by: Ink Empress Image: Town of Hilo, Hawaii
NOTE: Sedoka syllable count is interchangeable Ichikatauta: 5-7-5 Nikatauta: 5-7-5 Sedokada: 5-7-7 5-7-7 SETUP: I was THE baby ~~0~~ They were MY babies The Passed My Past my siblings called me the walking problem maker ~ I'm the problem child my kids once called me the walking problem solver ~ I am the problem ~ be better sitters they are to resolve ~ failure I win ~ +movies ~ they lose ~ be better parents they are to resolve ~ failure I lose ~ objectives they win ~~0~~ I miss long ago to be called a brat again and useless to them I miss recently to be told thanks dad again can you help me dad benefits I ~ had they have all passed on ~ but me their absence ~ is now my void benefits I ~ have they have all moved on ~ from me ocean parts ~ but not our hearts *to my wife and son who are now with my family
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