I miss

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*4th Place*
I miss
Poetic Form: Sedoka
Inspired: 2024 July 22
Contest Judged: 2024 August 08
Sponsored by: Ink Empress
Image: Town of Hilo, Hawaii

NOTE: Sedoka syllable count is interchangeable Ichikatauta: 5-7-5 Nikatauta: 5-7-5 Sedokada: 5-7-7 5-7-7 SETUP: I was THE baby ~~0~~ They were MY babies The Passed My Past my siblings called me the walking problem maker ~ I'm the problem child my kids once called me the walking problem solver ~ I am the problem ~ be better sitters they are to resolve ~ failure I win ~ +movies ~ they lose ~ be better parents they are to resolve ~ failure I lose ~ objectives they win ~~0~~ I miss long ago to be called a brat again and useless to them I miss recently to be told thanks dad again can you help me dad benefits I ~ had they have all passed on ~ but me their absence ~ is now my void benefits I ~ have they have all moved on ~ from me ocean parts ~ but not our hearts *to my wife and son who are now with my family

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/11/2024 3:02:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/11/2024 4:28:00 AM

Thank you, so kind of you, Sara. Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/8/2024 12:39:00 PM

Back with congratulations on your win. What a lovely "I miss" write/story. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write again.... Have a fun day............

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/8/2024 10:50:00 PM

My thanks, Paula, on this raining summer eve that dulls my senses. Aloha William

Ink Empress

Date: 8/8/2024 6:57:00 AM

Im so sorry about your wife and son and also family. And how wholeheartedly youv expressed the little things you miss about your childhood and past and family. Pleasure reading this. Congratulations

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/8/2024 10:48:00 PM

Accidents and reflections, poor barter 'ere enriching hope of my presence. I am in receipt of your extended gracious sincerities, Ink Empress. Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/22/2024 10:54:00 AM

What a lovely "I miss" write/story. I enjoyed your great picture. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a wonderful day writing away.....................

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/22/2024 11:28:00 AM

Thank you, Paula, I appreciate your visit and read of my entry, and for your thought-filled sharing. Aloha William