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I miss

NOTE: Sedoka syllable count is interchangeable
Ichikatauta: 
5-7-5
Nikatauta: 
5-7-5
Sedokada: 
5-7-7
5-7-7
SETUP: I was THE baby ~~0~~ They were MY babies
   The Passed                         My Past

my siblings called me 
the walking problem maker
 ~ I'm the problem child
my kids once called me 
the walking problem solver
 ~ I am the problem
 ~ be better sitters
they are to resolve ~ failure
I win ~ +movies ~ they lose
 ~ be better parents
they are to resolve ~ failure
I lose ~ objectives they win

~~0~~

I miss long ago
to be called a brat again
and useless to them
I miss recently
to be told thanks dad again
can you help me dad
benefits I ~ had
they have all passed on ~ but me
their absence ~ is now my void
benefits I ~ have
they have all moved on ~ from me
ocean parts ~ but not our hearts

*to my wife and son who are now with my family

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Sara Kendrick Date: 8/11/2024 3:02:00 AM Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara K Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/11/2024 4:28:00 AM Thank you, so kind of you, Sara. Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith Date: 8/8/2024 12:39:00 PM Back with congratulations on your win. What a lovely "I miss" write/story. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write again....  Have a fun day............ Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/8/2024 10:50:00 PM My thanks, Paula, on this raining summer eve that dulls my senses. Aloha William

Ink Empress Date: 8/8/2024 6:57:00 AM Im so sorry about your wife and son and also family. And how wholeheartedly youv expressed the little things you miss about your childhood and past and family. Pleasure reading this. Congratulations Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/8/2024 10:48:00 PM Accidents and reflections, poor barter 'ere enriching hope of my presence. I am in receipt of your extended gracious sincerities, Ink Empress. Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith Date: 7/22/2024 10:54:00 AM What a lovely "I miss" write/story. I enjoyed your great picture. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a wonderful day writing away..................... Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 7/22/2024 11:28:00 AM Thank you, Paula, I appreciate your visit and read of my entry, and for your thought-filled sharing. Aloha William