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I Love You

I wonder why
It's always so strange
                               to say
    and not just strange
        but almost a gulp and a choke
               even at a letter's close?
Just 'love' is not so hard
It's the YOU
"I    (gulp    choke!)   love YOU"
There!
I can say it silently    in my mind
      but!    face to face
                                or
          over the phone?
Gulp!
Choke!
YOU is so personal
Like    inserting your tongue when kissing good night
Like    accidentally brushing
                                     her leg
                                            under the table
"I love YOU" starts all sorts of mild    even WILD ideas forming
Face it
I am demented
DERANGED!
With some it drops off the tongue
                        as easily as    saying "Hi"
I wonder though?
What's back of those eyes
When his wife says to me
                                 "Love you"
When this happens
I always screw up - look at her husband
          then answer
Gulp!
Choke!
"Love you too"

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/5/2010 4:03:00 PM

YEs, kind of uncomfortable there. hahaha. and this might be a switch for you too! (actually I have many poems kind of like my Espana poem!) Just I never tried a sestina before! LUv, andrea

Sajdah Al-Riyami

Date: 6/11/2009 5:17:00 AM

HHAAHHA:GULP CHOKE LOVE YOU!You put such embarrasing moments to a laughin stage!:p

Brittany Paradis

Date: 5/4/2009 7:45:00 AM

This is so cute and very good.....I like it. *smile*

Cecilia Long

Date: 4/29/2009 10:50:00 AM

love this !! I wonder too!! your works are truly enjoyable!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/28/2009 3:33:00 PM

So good to see you online, Daver. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed "Iomindia." We definitely think along the same lines spiritually. Love, Carolyn

Charlene Bird

Date: 4/28/2009 2:24:00 PM

I agree, it is one of the hardest things to choke down and if it is the first time you have to pick that moment. A great write!

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 4/28/2009 1:11:00 AM

Hello Daver, very nice poem, funny, but true. Keep on posting. Ernilando

Kristy De La Keur Scoville

Date: 4/27/2009 9:42:00 PM

This is funny and very true for a lot of people. Thank you for your comments

Date: 4/27/2009 1:02:00 PM

Wonderful wit and creative use of humor in this poem. The unique style is interesting. Enjoyed it. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a wonderful week! Karen

Sami Al-Khalili

Date: 4/26/2009 7:05:00 PM

Ahahaha, I love the irony. We usually fall in love with those who are already in love, or a tight relationship. We believe we are the better ones, and it's usually most of the time true. Come on! Also the vocab. Great style as well. Yours truly, Sami.

Corinne Curcio

Date: 4/25/2009 4:08:00 PM

haha - I wasn't expecting that Daver :-D I'm happy to say that at my age, I'm not afraid to say that anymore - to those I do love :-)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/25/2009 12:31:00 PM

Oh, you had me going, Daver. Was not prepared for the last verse, but had a good laugh. There are all kinds of love, but sometimes our meanings are misinterpreted. I understand what you're saying, and there are times when it's difficult for me to speak of love as well. Nonetheless, I send love to you.

Laurie Ginn

Date: 4/25/2009 10:54:00 AM

You are so marvelously demented I LOVE YOU lol. I think its funny how people can say love ya but not I love you. I used to be a director of a daycare and I remember hearing the parents day that they loved the kids before they left. Shhessh my mom never said it when I was a child, she does now but I dont think people were as free with their emotions. Hearing from a friend's wife-whole new can of worms,,,I would so like to see your face.

Brian Anderson

Date: 4/25/2009 9:06:00 AM

very honest poem. i have a hard time saying it to my own family much my friends wife. well said, daver

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/25/2009 7:27:00 AM

This is so "right on"....choking on such intimate words....it truly makes me laugh with the wit and human nature of it all. Don't you find that people do toss this phrase around so easily today?...and others simply choke up (my husband is one....but if he says it....he really means it!) I love the humor and honesty here...the ending of your poem, is priceless!!! LOVE YOU!! :) hee hee