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I Feel Like,,

I Feel Lost at Sea, Searching for an Answer, for Help. Sinking like the Titanic, No Hope of Surviving. I Feel like an Urban Legend, never been able to be Discovered To be understood... -Brittany- (please comment and rate if you dont mind :) if you comment ill read your poems and comment on them :) well thank you for reading)

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Date: 10/5/2011 4:39:00 PM
Okies. Why do you feel lost at sea? Build on line 1 Then WHY do you feel like you are sinking? and why the Titanic? build on line 2. Why do you feel like an Urban Legend? [to me that would be like Jack the Ripper]...you can list your form as Verse but you really need to write more for it to be a verse dear new poet friend. Light & Love
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Date: 10/6/2011 12:19:00 PM
oki doki thank you for you advice Debbie :) ima try and change it thank you