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I died a little inside

Taking my place in your gazing blue eyes
Who stole the glow of my dawning sunrise?
As defiling your virtues you obliquely lied,
Pounding my heart till I died a little inside.

When a brilliant sunny day said goodbye
As lightening arrived to thunder blue sky
Storming my life, you left me teary eyed
Exacting high price by forfeiting my pride.

Reluctantly I disclaimed your sweet smile
As your blatant animosity put me in exile
And adulating ill-will you ceded to hate,
Trampling on destiny you altered my fate.

On my horizon cried your reign of disdain
As you rejected goodwill again and again.
Remnants of aspirations no longer claim
A desire of passions to reignite our flame.

Meaning of love soon indelibly changed
Revoking your name from souls estranged.
Hurt still remained, woefully pacified--
Lingering listlessly, till I died a little inside.

February 9, 2019
I died a little inside contest by Silent One

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 2/11/2019 11:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Vijay. Love can be such an emotional ride. lol! Elaine
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:59:00 PM
A poem filled with emotion, vijay. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 2/11/2019 11:55:00 AM
Brilliant and well written. Congratulations on your win, Vijay.
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Date: 2/10/2019 11:58:00 PM
- Congratulations on your beautiful winning poem, Vijay :) - Have a lovely new week - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/10/2019 11:57:00 PM
till I died a little inside, the poem ends and the words resonate in your mind's eras for some time. A moving piece apart, excellently penned, Vijay Pandit.
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Date: 2/10/2019 6:28:00 PM
Your words always belong in the winners circle. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy
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Date: 2/10/2019 4:20:00 PM
A lover's betrayal certainly stings, Vijay. Few things hurt as much as rejection, especially when one partner still clings to hope. It is easy to see why you feel like you "died a little inside." Beautifully written, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 2/10/2019 4:16:00 PM
As always great rhyme and flow Vijay...
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Date: 2/10/2019 9:11:00 AM
such a wrenching piece beautifully rendered, vijay... you depicted love lost in a pensive tone... a winner for me..huggs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/10/2019 11:12:00 AM
Thank you Nette..appreciate the kind remarks.
Date: 2/10/2019 4:58:00 AM
Great poem for a contest and had to be sad. Your poetry is however top of the class and hope you'll place high.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/10/2019 8:12:00 AM
Much appreciate your kind remarks Victor..many many thanks.
Date: 2/10/2019 3:24:00 AM
Heartbreaking words which appear to linger on...pain is not easy to get over...hard to erase. In my eyes, a sure winner! Regards // paul
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/10/2019 8:11:00 AM
Much appreciate your kind feedback, Paul..many many thanks. Kind regards.
Date: 2/10/2019 3:09:00 AM
When relationships end you certainly die a bit inside, well composed Vijay. Good luck. Tom.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/10/2019 8:10:00 AM
Thank you Tom. Appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/9/2019 10:44:00 PM
Love, a powerful emotion indeed. It can leave you breathless, when truly felt- and if not, heartbroken. You have expressed this perfectly. The pain, the hurt. Your words always move me. "Pounding my heart till I died a little inside" Yes, I can feel this. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/10/2019 8:10:00 AM
Thank you for your generous feedback Brandy..much appreciate your visit and comments, as always.
Date: 2/9/2019 3:16:00 PM
Wow! This is very good Vijay! I hope it does well in the contest. Deep emotion :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2019 4:15:00 PM
So appreciate your kind remarks..many thanks for your visit and support, Heidi.
Date: 2/9/2019 1:19:00 PM
Powerful, painful, well penned, Vijay.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2019 4:14:00 PM
Appreciate your visit and comments MLK..many many thanks.
Date: 2/9/2019 12:44:00 PM
A very mournful poem, Vijay, very well written.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2019 4:13:00 PM
That was the theme for the contest..I tried my best to make it so..thank you Lawrence for your visit and comments.
Date: 2/9/2019 8:00:00 AM
Poems like this make one to be resurrected because of their beauty my friend, Vijay and not die at all! ...probably a little bit...!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2019 4:11:00 PM
Thank you for the vote of confidence my friend..always appreciate your visit and comments.