Vijay Pandit Poet Rhyme

I Died a Little Inside

Taking my place in your gazing blue eyes
Who stole the glow of my dawning sunrise?
As defiling your virtues you obliquely lied,
Pounding my heart till I died a little inside.

When a brilliant sunny day said goodbye
As lightening arrived to thunder blue sky
Storming my life, you left me teary eyed
Exacting high price by forfeiting my pride.

Reluctantly I disclaimed your sweet smile
As your blatant animosity put me in exile
And adulating ill-will you ceded to hate,
Trampling on destiny you altered my fate.

On my horizon cried your reign of disdain
As you rejected goodwill again and again.
Remnants of aspirations no longer claim
A desire of passions to reignite our flame.

Meaning of love soon indelibly changed
Revoking your name from souls estranged.
Hurt still remained, woefully pacified--
Lingering listlessly, till I died a little inside.

February 9, 2019
Placed first:Early March 2019 contest by Brian Strand
Placed second:I died a little inside contest by Silent One

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Angela Crabtree December 1, 2020 at 7:03 PM Great write, Vijay. Sad but true :(

Brandy Nicole March 3, 2019 at 7:51 PM Congratulations Vijay, on this win. Again, your words move me. ~ Brandy

Freddie Robinson Jr. February 22, 2019 at 12:18 PM This is one GrEaT poem, Vijay! Sparkling emotive lines throughout ... On my horizon cried your reign of disdain As you rejected goodwill again and again. Pure poetry, my talented poet friend. Love and smiles and smiles of joy always.

Elaine George February 11, 2019 at 11:46 PM Congratulations on your win, Vijay. Love can be such an emotional ride. lol! Elaine

Andrea Dietrich February 11, 2019 at 2:59 PM A poem filled with emotion, vijay. Congrats on your win.

Warren Doll February 11, 2019 at 11:55 AM Brilliant and well written. Congratulations on your win, Vijay.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 10, 2019 at 11:58 PM - Congratulations on your beautiful winning poem, Vijay :) - Have a lovely new week - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Aniruddha Pathak February 10, 2019 at 11:57 PM till I died a little inside, the poem ends and the words resonate in your mind's eras for some time. A moving piece apart, excellently penned, Vijay Pandit.

Brandy Nicole February 10, 2019 at 6:28 PM Your words always belong in the winners circle. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy

Carolyn Devonshire February 10, 2019 at 4:20 PM A lover's betrayal certainly stings, Vijay. Few things hurt as much as rejection, especially when one partner still clings to hope. It is easy to see why you feel like you "died a little inside." Beautifully written, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn

Silent One February 10, 2019 at 4:16 PM As always great rhyme and flow Vijay...

Nette Onclaud February 10, 2019 at 9:11 AM such a wrenching piece beautifully rendered, vijay... you depicted love lost in a pensive tone... a winner for me..huggs Vijay Pandit February 10, 2019 at 11:12 AM Thank you Nette..appreciate the kind remarks.

Paul Callus February 10, 2019 at 3:24 AM Heartbreaking words which appear to linger on...pain is not easy to get over...hard to erase. In my eyes, a sure winner! Regards // paul Vijay Pandit February 10, 2019 at 8:11 AM Much appreciate your kind feedback, Paul..many many thanks. Kind regards.

Tom Cunningham February 10, 2019 at 3:09 AM When relationships end you certainly die a bit inside, well composed Vijay. Good luck. Tom. Vijay Pandit February 10, 2019 at 8:10 AM Thank you Tom. Appreciate your comments.

Brandy Nicole February 9, 2019 at 10:44 PM Love, a powerful emotion indeed. It can leave you breathless, when truly felt- and if not, heartbroken. You have expressed this perfectly. The pain, the hurt. Your words always move me. "Pounding my heart till I died a little inside" Yes, I can feel this. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit February 10, 2019 at 8:10 AM Thank you for your generous feedback Brandy..much appreciate your visit and comments, as always.

Heidi Sands February 9, 2019 at 3:16 PM Wow! This is very good Vijay! I hope it does well in the contest. Deep emotion :) Vijay Pandit February 9, 2019 at 4:15 PM So appreciate your kind remarks..many thanks for your visit and support, Heidi.

M. L. Kiser February 9, 2019 at 1:19 PM Powerful, painful, well penned, Vijay. Vijay Pandit February 9, 2019 at 4:14 PM Appreciate your visit and comments MLK..many many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp February 9, 2019 at 12:44 PM A very mournful poem, Vijay, very well written. Vijay Pandit February 9, 2019 at 4:13 PM That was the theme for the contest..I tried my best to make it so..thank you Lawrence for your visit and comments.

Demetrios Trifiatis February 9, 2019 at 8:00 AM Poems like this make one to be resurrected because of their beauty my friend, Vijay and not die at all! ...probably a little bit...! Vijay Pandit February 9, 2019 at 4:11 PM Thank you for the vote of confidence my friend..always appreciate your visit and comments.