Brenda Meier-Hans Poet Rhyme

I Cannot Look

I cannot look I will not look 
That’s not you inside

Jaws of life are roaring
Trying to cut you free
Crimson are the car seats
Tears are all I see 

I cannot look I will not look 
That’s not you inside

That body in the white bed
With tubes all hanging out
We all just stand in horror
While doctors run about

I cannot look, I will not look
That’s not you inside

I’ve already seen the bandage 
Wrapped around your head
I will not look inside the box
Now your eternal bed

I can’t look I will not look 
That’s not you inside

Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 
09.23.2014
Contest: The Poet III 
Gautami Phookan

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Gry Christensen September 26, 2014 at 3:42 PM A very dramatic experience penned down here. So sorry you had to go through something like this. Well written and I like the style very much. Brenda Meier-Hans September 26, 2014 at 4:32 PM Thanks Gary and thank you for stopping by.

Liam Mcdaid September 26, 2014 at 4:31 AM really touching beautiful piece of writing Brenda Meier-Hans September 26, 2014 at 8:22 AM Thanks Liam.

Maurice Yvonne September 25, 2014 at 4:35 PM You are so talented. I am sorry you had to experience such a tragedy so young. I will see this one on the podium next. Brenda Meier-Hans September 25, 2014 at 7:06 PM Thanks for being so sweet Maurice.

Tim Smith September 25, 2014 at 10:47 AM How horrific but well penned....hugs to you....Tim Brenda Meier-Hans September 25, 2014 at 1:26 PM Thanks Tim. It was a long time ago.

Richard Lamoureux September 25, 2014 at 9:24 AM This is so sad, I hope it is not a real experience although you made it feel real. Brenda Meier-Hans September 25, 2014 at 1:25 PM He was my best friend, 19 years old. My cousin died in the same accident and I really couldn't look. Our happy carefree days were over.

Cynthia Ferguson September 25, 2014 at 4:52 AM wow I can feel all that was real for you, you are a good poet yourself:) Brenda Meier-Hans September 25, 2014 at 1:21 PM Yes Cynthia it was real.

Jan Allison September 24, 2014 at 2:16 AM oh this is sad Brenda. I especially like ' I will not look inside the box Now your eternal bed' - amazing imagery my friend. Hope this does well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx Brenda Meier-Hans September 24, 2014 at 9:42 AM Thank you so much Jan

Daniel Human September 24, 2014 at 1:17 AM Really moving theme and content Brenda! Well done! Daniel. Brenda Meier-Hans September 24, 2014 at 9:41 AM Thank you Daniel