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I Cannot Look

I cannot look I will not look 
That’s not you inside

Jaws of life are roaring
Trying to cut you free
Crimson are the car seats
Tears are all I see 

I cannot look I will not look 
That’s not you inside

That body in the white bed
With tubes all hanging out
We all just stand in horror
While doctors run about

I cannot look, I will not look
That’s not you inside

I’ve already seen the bandage 
Wrapped around your head
I will not look inside the box
Now your eternal bed

I can’t look I will not look 
That’s not you inside

Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 
09.23.2014
Contest: The Poet III 
Gautami Phookan

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Gry Christensen Date: 9/26/2014 3:42:00 PM A very dramatic experience penned down here. So sorry you had to go through something like this. Well written and I like the style very much. Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/26/2014 4:32:00 PM Thanks Gary and thank you for stopping by.

Liam Mcdaid Date: 9/26/2014 4:31:00 AM really touching beautiful piece of writing Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/26/2014 8:22:00 AM Thanks Liam.

Maurice Yvonne Date: 9/25/2014 4:35:00 PM You are so talented. I am sorry you had to experience such a tragedy so young. I will see this one on the podium next. Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/25/2014 7:06:00 PM Thanks for being so sweet Maurice.

Tim Smith Date: 9/25/2014 10:47:00 AM How horrific but well penned....hugs to you....Tim Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/25/2014 1:26:00 PM Thanks Tim. It was a long time ago.

Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/25/2014 9:24:00 AM This is so sad, I hope it is not a real experience although you made it feel real. Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/25/2014 1:25:00 PM He was my best friend, 19 years old. My cousin died in the same accident and I really couldn't look. Our happy carefree days were over.

Cynthia Ferguson Date: 9/25/2014 4:52:00 AM wow I can feel all that was real for you, you are a good poet yourself:) Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/25/2014 1:21:00 PM Yes Cynthia it was real.

Jan Allison Date: 9/24/2014 2:16:00 AM oh this is sad Brenda. I especially like ' I will not look inside the box Now your eternal bed' - amazing imagery my friend. Hope this does well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/24/2014 9:42:00 AM Thank you so much Jan

Daniel Human Date: 9/24/2014 1:17:00 AM Really moving theme and content Brenda! Well done! Daniel. Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/24/2014 9:41:00 AM Thank you Daniel