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I Cannot Look

I cannot look I will not look That’s not you inside Jaws of life are roaring Trying to cut you free Crimson are the car seats Tears are all I see I cannot look I will not look That’s not you inside That body in the white bed With tubes all hanging out We all just stand in horror While doctors run about I cannot look, I will not look That’s not you inside I’ve already seen the bandage Wrapped around your head I will not look inside the box Now your eternal bed I can’t look I will not look That’s not you inside Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 09.23.2014 Contest: The Poet III Gautami Phookan

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Date: 9/26/2014 3:42:00 PM
A very dramatic experience penned down here. So sorry you had to go through something like this. Well written and I like the style very much.
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/26/2014 4:32:00 PM
Thanks Gary and thank you for stopping by.
Date: 9/26/2014 4:31:00 AM
really touching beautiful piece of writing
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/26/2014 8:22:00 AM
Thanks Liam.
Date: 9/25/2014 4:35:00 PM
You are so talented. I am sorry you had to experience such a tragedy so young. I will see this one on the podium next.
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/25/2014 7:06:00 PM
Thanks for being so sweet Maurice.
Date: 9/25/2014 10:47:00 AM
How horrific but well penned....hugs to you....Tim
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/25/2014 1:26:00 PM
Thanks Tim. It was a long time ago.
Date: 9/25/2014 9:24:00 AM
This is so sad, I hope it is not a real experience although you made it feel real.
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/25/2014 1:25:00 PM
He was my best friend, 19 years old. My cousin died in the same accident and I really couldn't look. Our happy carefree days were over.
Date: 9/25/2014 4:52:00 AM
wow I can feel all that was real for you, you are a good poet yourself:)
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/25/2014 1:21:00 PM
Yes Cynthia it was real.
Date: 9/24/2014 2:16:00 AM
oh this is sad Brenda. I especially like ' I will not look inside the box Now your eternal bed' - amazing imagery my friend. Hope this does well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/24/2014 9:42:00 AM
Thank you so much Jan
Date: 9/24/2014 1:17:00 AM
Really moving theme and content Brenda! Well done! Daniel.
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/24/2014 9:41:00 AM
Thank you Daniel